This is Nikayla here dropping in for a review!
So I found this to be different from what you usually post or do with your poetry, and that interested me quite a bit. The poem feels quite condensed in the sense that it's one stanza with a similar meter throughout. And I have to say, I'm not a fan of this one. Not to say that all of it is bad, but I've seen it as an experiment in a different style and I'm not that deeply rooted into it. One of the first things that I realized is that it's missing or lacking in the emotional impact that you usually give off with your poetry.
I'm not saying that poems regarding friendship can't be emotional or powerful, because they can, but this one doesn't accomplish that. For the title, you use a word that is also at the poem, which I don't mind, but just because you used a synonym for friendship doesn't make it so you get more brownie points. A lot of the words that you use to end lines start with 'y', and not to say that all adverbs start with that letter, but I sure did find a lot of them lying throughout this piece. Breaking this down, the first three lines don't really happen to grip me into the poem. We get that movies talk about friendship as if it's something glorious, and I don't know if this is intentional, but so do you.
The poem is simple and sweet--and that's about it. I do have to say that you give off this feeling of it being a bit of a narrative, but I'm not sure if that's a positive in my mind. The poem, to me, relies too heavy on it's theme that could easily come from a Disney Channel show about friendship and how it's glorious, instead of what I see to be your strengths. Your lines that grip the reader with their emotion and your usage of imagery, both of which aren't here.
It's different, branching out from your usual style. I'm a little confused as to what the reader is supposed to feel in this case. I understand at this point that the other person in the poem is supposed to be the friend of the speaker, but the reader is a little uncertain of what you're trying to give off. At the same time and at surface-value, it's a poem about friendship that I find to be lacking in new ideas, which is fine, but if you want to keep the reader, you have to focus on making the execution of that idea different or newer.
Best,
Kayla.
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