(A/N: Ignore the differences in capitalization. I wrote some of this on a computer and some of this on an iPad.)
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Wow! This is beautiful, I love the italics, quotations and the emphasis used. The last paragraph is my favourite, it concludes the poem with a thoughtful touch and flows (with the rest of the piece) wonderfully. The only thing I’d suggest (if I am to be picky) is perhaps a little tweak on the grammar and punctuation. Either way I thoroughly enjoyed the poem.
Hello!
I saw that this has been sitting in the Green Room with no reviews, so I decided to check it out. And, I love it! As a diver on my swimming team, this is a beautiful poem that I'm going to write it down somewhere so I can keep it.
I loved how you moved the poem along continuously, and you put a lot of emotion into this piece. I'm not much of a criticism reviewer, so sorry! But the thing is, I just loved the piece, and there's nothing that I would say you need to work on!
I'd just like to say that you're an excellent writer, and don't ever give up on your dreams! I hope to read more of your work because I know it will be just as good. Keep up the great work, and good luck!
Hello, manilla.
I Love this Poem
I would like to point out a few things I noticed while reading it though.
One, when you have a 'I' make sure its capitalized.
secondly i would suggest that the "because parts' be spelt with a captital B.
-Lady Myserio.
As a lover of the ocean, I love this.
Thank you for this comment and the one above!