Young Writers Society

I like the first line within the poem. "they are a voice of mine i pretend is heard," I like this line, but I feel like it can be rephrase a little better, so it flows much nicer. I like the act parts, but feel that this one "act iii" is rather unnecessary. (Not the stanza but the word.) "Now I like the description that these lines give writing is art
the way passion ebbs, overflows
distinctive memories painted on canvas," i feel as if a few words are missing from it, but it's rather nice. Otherwise this is a very nice poem.

This is very well written. The only things I have to say are that the "act 1, 2, 3, 4" seem unnecessary. Is there a specific reason why you put those there?
There is a punctuation error (I think) in the line "Although as if, writing itself ceases vulnerability". I think the comma should be placed after "although". So it would read as "Although, as if writing itself ceases vulnerability". Other than that it is a good poem and a good topic. Happy writing!

Hey, farie here with a review....let me just say how passionate this poems seems, and i love that! It’s adorable and it makes me smile when i read the mystery you set up in the beginning. This made me want to read this when I saw it in the Literary area. The things you put like “the pen as your weapon” is pretty deep and very creative. I heart that!!! Keep writing!!!!!