Ahh this is an excellent poem!! As illy said, it's awesome how this poem shows both the good and bad sides of technology. And I also appreciate that you ended it on a positive note, with the narrator realizing that moderation is best (at least how I interpreted it)! Okay, on to some specifics...
You sucked all energy out of my life
Ooh I though this was a powerful line, it really emphasizes how draining the relationship was! ^-^ (It definitely can't feel good to have your energy sucked out of you... :p)
The people around me looked so happy
This line is super relatable too; so often we look at others and think that they're better or happier than us, when in fact that's usually not the case. So I love that you addressed that here!
Away from my books, I felt like a dunce.
Okay, this might just be me, but I thought the "books" part was a little random? It didn't seem quite related to the technology/friendship theme. I wasn't entirely sure what your purpose for including this part was, although of course I might just be missing something here! ^-^
Where I and you have equal controls
Ah yes! It's definitely important to have a good balance within a friendship. I'm so happy the narrator was able to realize that and change their relationship for the better c:
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this poem and I hope you keep writing!
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