Young Writers Society

This is a joyful celebration of one who's weirdness matches your own, the recognition of such weirdness being commonly identified as, "love." And nearly as perfect as your joint soul mating dance, but for a missed comma here: "She shines, my days the fairy she is." But think of it as a tiny irrelevant detail, much like a tiny mole decorating your left butt cheek, in no way detracting from your intense, borderline obsessive, (for who but a love crazed maniac would worry about the separation caused by her Bosom's Bestie having other, as weirdly wrote, "mates?)" emotional connection. A "Godsent" emotional connection so deep that, let me assure you, surely does not need this poetic expression or declaration, and knows nothing of time or distance, but, like a sense of longing, only grows stronger with absence. When you are blessed with such a loved gift, don't squander time worrying pointlessly about when it may leave you-enloy every preciously weird moment you have together.

There is a good rhyme scheme to this and also good uses of repetition. There is also good use of form as well with with each stanza having a consistent rhyme scheme and also each stanza has a unique topic to it despite all of the topics being unified under a single theme. Also I like how there is a good combination of literal lines and figurative lines, though there are more literal lines than figurative, poems don't always have to be wrapped in riddles so this still works well at conveying a message. That said this is quite a good poem.

Awesome poem! This is such a cute poem <333333333

First though, I don't have much to say about this poem that is negative, but there are a few things.

I remember the day when I asked the Lord

Mine isn't enough, I want another sis

No reply, none- I was disappointed

Cuz I wasn't expecting this...

She shines my days the fairy she is

Guarding me from every negative ray

And guides my way with her smile

Keeping me joyous everyday

Hey Anne27,

Great job writing this piece, I'm usually not one for poetry but this was a fun and easy read.

The very last paragraph especially was so true for me in my friendships.

The one thing I saw is that "I remember the day when I asked the lord" The lord should be capitalized I believe.

Keep up the great writing, would love to see more of your work.

Merry Christmas

Great poem. It is written with a good flow to it.

The ending of the poem was put together very well and allows for the readers own reflection on their own close friends and how much the people around them mean to them.

It is also always good to have a friend that you can consider a brother or sister to you. Those are the best of friends and the ones that stick around for a long time. Do not forget how much that friend means to you.

You seem like a great friend to your friends.