Goodday, Anne!
First off, I liked this poem a lot, it held a lot of emotion. I'd like to note that I've never read the book it is inspired by, and yet, I get the picture.
This is my favorite part:
I want to see your eyes happy too
I want to talk to you about meaningful things
Although, the next sentence feels a little unnecessarily wordy:
I want you to be free to cry due to your struggles
But maybe that's just my preference.
The poem could benefit from some more punctuation, but it's fine without it.
I like how you capitalized the last two words to reflect the title of the book.
Once again, I like the poem, and I can't wait to see what else you write!
-Lady Tano
Points: 86
Reviews: 10
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