Young Writers Society

Hiya Ashlyn here for a review!! Before I dive into it though please know that this review is not intended to offend you or make your writing look bad.

They compare me to her

To find me inferior

Ad it does make me sad

Even though I seem brave from the exterior.

Aasdfhasdfashdfljhh this can be felt <333 Idk why, but it seems to be human nature to compare people with little regard for anything else-such as relationships, the happiness of the person(s) being compared to and you know what? It's just not right <33
No one is inferior just because they don't measure up to someone elses messed up standards.
And absolutely no one should have to put on a brave exterior to hide pain <33
What if you wrote it this way instead-

i don't mind being compared
only to be found inferior
and it doesn't matter
for my self worth is define by my bravery

This has a healthier message to it.
It implies that the immature little comparisons our parents make aren't the things that define us. Yes those comparisons can effect our self-esteem, and maybe even make us feel like curling into a ball and giving up, but guess what?
Who has the power in this situation?
You not anything your mother says.
You know why?
Because YOU and YOU alone have the power to define your self-worth. Anything other people say is technically illusionary (for lack of a better word) because the world is viewed through your perspective, and everyone else is merely the result of the brain processes that help you see, hear, and feel, therefore it's you that gives anything meaning.
And you can choose to ignore those comparisons and define your own self worth.
And you know what you are defined by when you decide your own self-worth? Brave <33

'She's more obedient and scholarly

And I'm all that too- just conversely

She's better and better, I'm worse and worse

Those comments making me live somberly

That word conversely
'She's better and better, I'm worse and worse' that's an exact description of that kind of situation. And yes-it breaks my heart to see anyone have to write that <33
Honestly, I'm going through a similar thing with my younger brother.
I used to be viewed as the mature, intelligent sibling, who could write like an adult, and draw beautifully where as my bro was always the one blamed for being doing the wrong thing, and getting angry to easily.
Now, that he's gotten older (still younger then me, but not as young as he used to be) and learned to control his temper a bit, I've been dethroned.
He's now the mature one with all the interesting, intelligent observations and thoughts, and he's become a better drawer then I am.
To make things worse he really does have a better sense of humor then me but anyway...it feels like I've been reduced to someone whose only strength is kindness which isn't the only strength I want to be defined by
So yeah, a wedge has grown and it does feel like my brother is 'getting better and better' while I'm just 'getting worse and worse'.
Aadfjhsadfjhasdfjkhh what is it with society and measuring someones worth by how obedient and scholarly they are to resume commentary? Why can't worth be defined by their capacity to feel, or by how maturely they handle tough situations?
Intelligence is a subjective thing, but being able to feel and maturely handle situations? Those are things that are universally impressive traits that are increasingly lacking in this world.
Honestly, the ignorance of your mother (I'm assuming your mother is the one comparing you to your sister) astounds me.
She's completely missing the fact that you are your own person and that the things you supposedly struggle with shouldn't be defined or compared to the things that another person does well.
She's triply ignorant for thinking perfection is your sisters one defining trait. I'll bet you my last dollar she has plenty of faults. She's a sister after all

I do really love her though

Even if we do get in a row'

I'm the one more eager for reunion

While 'her' love, she doesn't show.

Sisterly love is eternal rather it's returned or not <33 See, this is one area where you seem superior to your sister-your more willing to express your love for her.
Uadfadsfhdfjhasfdjkhsfh that concludes this...not so very review like review I hope it helped, and I hope your relationship with your sister gets better <33
-Ashlyn