The She-Devil

Hi Anne,

First off Anne my suggestion Anne is that the poem was alright but really sad through Anne let me tell you why in the poem where the poem said She goes about torturing everyone,
taking revenges, backstabbing her closed ones.
Still getting sympathy for being the one who survived
betrayals. She wants to make her story
as pathetic as possible. She
trusts no one, loves no one, cares for no one-
and yet she manages to have a whole collection
of vials of love, filled with trust,
waiting to break them one by one. they feeled that her life was miserable and I feel bad for that girl in the poem i dropped a tear starting when i read this Anne.

My Compliment Anne is that reading your poems made me learn something is to keep trying hard to continuing writing and hopefully we see more pieces of your work Anne soon.

Good Wishes Anne of Writing!

I just want to let you know how much I liked this poem, and how great the last line was. The way you put it in bold and the rhyming and the contrast of darkness and heaven is very well done. And the poem itself is full of sentence variety and description. Awesome poem!

I’ve dealt with this type of person in my life.What makes it even worse is that she was a childhood friend.The thing with these people is that it’s always going to be someone you trust.It’s mentioned in the poem,too,that she has tons of people who trust her,who love her.They don’t know the truth till it’s too late.I hope you have a good and wonderful day and night.

Hey hey! Alex here with a review!


Okay I just wanna say that I love how this poem is worded! The She-Devil? Hell yea! I love the way you made this free-range poem sound exactly like they make it sound in the movies! Like- My brain back here is just teasing me because I know I can never do something as good as this!Your past stories are just as wonderful aswell! Keep up the good work and keep writing! <3

Hello! Here for a review. I feel like a lot of people have dealt with these sorts of people in their lives.

I think the first line would be better later on. You've really thrown the reader in at the deep end so there's nowhere to really go from there. It would be good to built up to her 'torturing' people.

From personal experience with people like this, it starts of subtle and builds up. Just a few little things that don't add up and then when you've put the pieces together, it's too late. It would be interesting if you incorporated that into the poem. Like, by the end of the poem you feel trapped with her with nowhere else to turn. These types of people like having others depending on them, they love being the centre of attention and see others just as their puppets. It seems the narrator is a puppet that has cut themselves from her strings.

I did really enjoy the line 'She likes the shining tears and mosaic hearts.' That line in particular was very equal parts scary and beautiful and felt very symbolic of this person.

Hope this helps!