Sucks..everything sucks. Life sucks. Studying sucks. Running after dreams sucks. But thinking doesn't suck. Writing doesn't suck. Music doesn't suck. Anime doesn't suck.
Family sucks. Friends suck. Time sucks. damn it, without it I wouldn't be there, though.
This laptop sucks. My PC sucks. The phone sucks. People around suck. The lights suck. The fan sucks. Kids suck. Girls suck. Boys suck. Women suck. Men suck.
Clothes suck, too. Paper doesn't. Pen doesn't. Notepad doesn't. Dairy doesn't. Dictionary doesn't. Short story collection doesn't.
A goodbye sucks. Being the fool sucks. Being me sucks. Being here sucks. Being not whom I am supposed to be sucks. Being out of the world sucks..an't
But, sometimes being out of the world feels the best.
Chatting sucks. Virgos suck. Leos suck. So do other zodiacs. All suck.
Even me...I suck the most.
Now, writing lyrics sucks. Writing poetry sucks. Talking to someone sucks. Crowd sucks. Things suck a lottt like hell.
Time sucks. Cus it doesn't stand still..and it goes on very fast. Just too fast. Can't control it. Just can't.
And..what sucks? Ending a story forcibly. Yeah, bringing this to an end though I don't wanna stop..
I don't wanna stop..don't wanna stop..don't wanna stop..
Still, I am stopping. Stopped.
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I thought this work makes no sense at all but as an otaku I think of a way to understand this work.In general,this poetry makes no sense for me at the end but I think I got your point right.
I do not know why this work makes me feel so sad and full of emotions because you say everything sucks and that you are sad that the time goes by so fast and this is true,the time waits for no one and we are always late for catch it.
Anime will never suck and writing a good story will never suck but ending a good work always sucks because you want to go on.
As I saw,you are an otaku,which makes me really happy to see someone like me.
hmm, otaku or not, it just makes me happy to see someone being happy cus of me.
Hi Kaneki ( currently running under the name Sasaki in Tokyo Ghoul) here
You are completely right. Anime can never suck. And if you are feeling low, which you obviously are, you should just re-watch all those anime's you grew up watching or have some memory related with. And i'm sure it will help. A great deal. If it doesn't start watching Tokyo Ghoul. After completing both the seasons you would really forget about this thing called misery - especially after seeing the whole lot of those people getting tortured, cornered and torn into pieces. In the last episode of Tokyo ghoul season two, you will be crying for Kaneki (not me that one) and Touka.
If you are not getting interested in this by my talk then you should watch few seconds of ending of both seasons (especially the moment in first one where it ends with Kaneki eating up that monster torturer after defeating him with his cool moves and the second season ending where his best friend the center of his universe is killed). I apologize for these spoilers.
Here is the outline of the story's beginning -
Tokyo ghoul is the story of Kaneki, a part ghoul, who have organs of a ghoul transplanted into him after an accident; after which he had to deal with the dangerous world of ghouls (eating humans dead bodies and exemplary torture with centipedes etc. etc.) and a plot that is seriously bigger than the ghoul teachings - the clash between a victim and convict who aren't defined.
Its not as horrible as it sounds. Its amazing, even those scenes with centipedes.
*Tokyo ghoul's crazy fan*
Dude, reviewing is something very important. Since you are new here, you might not have realized it yet..But, it's ok. I am glad that you tried your best to cheer me up. But, next time when you give a review, write if for the writer and the writing. If you wanna give any personal help, you can add it, too. And, if you wanna give just personal help, no feedback on the writing, just don't click on the Review.
I am not saying this to hurt you. I am just saying this so that you can know your mistakes and correct them and turn into an awesome reviewer!
First time is hard for all, in fact it was the same for me. I used to use the same words again and again and then Big Brother told me about my mistakes and then I tried to correct them seriously. Trust me, I think, I have become a good reviewer now.
And, don't feel down. Check your wall, there's a surprise!
Its just the start i know and i have to learn a lot of things. but as each one has different goals their way of achieving as well so there is no point comparing. i mean...my goal at the moment is to get enough points to publish my work without any worry and i am a really bad critique. i like writing than judging the writing. thankyou for the advice and most certainly there is nothing in this world about writing that puts my spirit down.
oi, since you have got me, you don't have to worry about points!
just check your PMs
Soulfulwriter rollin' in this bish
Review: Nothing.
Personal Opinion: Yeah, that's how I feel about life in general sometimes. Everything sucks, the wind sucks cause it's cold. Exams suck because I have to study for them. My bed sucks because I can't get right in it. Shoot, even the socks I wear suck because they have the nerve to not fit right lol. Silly, I know. But, it's a part of everyday life I know you know that. -I feel like breaking into a song and dance. That I know you want me song by Pitbull. 1 2 3 4 Uno dos tres Quatro, I know you want me.- Sorry.
Love your suckish poem.
You literally just said that the review is "nothing", so why did you mark this as a review? It cheats the writer out of good feedback, because once the work has two reviews, it's out of the Green Room and people aren't as likely to review it.
Sorry if I sound rude, but this is something I've been seeing a lot lately and I'm just really frustrated with it.
I agree with clever..dude, you are clever.
I am sort of frustrated with it, too. But, I didn't really mind it this time cus this work was posted only cus I wanted to post it. I don't think I need much feedback on it.
Besides, clever, if you are really thinking this wisely, why didn't you leave a review? I think, if you read a piece, some sort of a suggestion will definitely pop up in your mind, even if the suggestion is few..
No, I mean as the review I didn't see anything wrong. I normally put I see nothing wrong, or at least I don't see anything wrong. Mistake on my part. Reviews aren't my strong point but I am trying. I am sorry if it seemed like I said 'this isn't a review' but it was.
don't beat me up and take my lunch money.
Um, no ones beating you up. I was just pointing out that you didn't really leave a review. There's an option to just post it as a comment if you don't have any criticism. A review should help the author to improve.
And TahaT11n, I didn't leave a review because I didn't want to. Simple as that. I'm not obligated to leave reviews just because I don't like other people's.
Sorry, it's nothing personal. There are a bunch of reviews I could've chosen to do this on, but I just happened to comment on yours. And if I sound mean, it's just because I'm REALLY frustrated.
You're frustrated because people don't really leave reviews? Or for another reason?
Yeah, basically. It might not seem like a big problem to you, but it is because of the way YWS works. I'll try to explain:
When a work is first posted on YWS, it goes into the Green Room. It doesn't leave the Green Room until it gets two reviews. There's a difference between a review and a comment. A review helps the author improve by pointing out things that are wrong with the work. A comment doesn't. A review has to be 250 characters minimum, and you have to mark the "review" button before posting. Then, you get points, and the comment is marked as a review. Comments are not, so they aren't counted towards getting a work out of the green room. Once the work gets two comments marked as a review, it leaves the green room. Once that happens, the author isn't guaranteed reviews anymore.
However, you have people such as yourself who write comments, but mark them as reviews. Just because a comment is 250 characters doesn't make it a review. A review must help the author. When people write comments, but mark them as reviews, then the work is one step closer to leaving the green room, but it hasn't gotten any advice. This is harmful to writers who actually want to improve, but end up not receiving feedback because their work flies out of the green room after receiving two comments marked as reviews.
I had this trouble with my most recent poem, and have still yet to get any feedback on it because it left the green room so quickly. This is a pervasive problem. I've been seeing it everywhere, so yeah, I'm frustrated with it.
oh well....
I agree with clever. Work to give valuable feedback to the writer to help them beautify the world with their writing. It's okay to give your personal opinion on the topic but you need to also add some constructive criticism. Soulful, you seem like you have good intentions but you just need to be given a few pointers on reviewing (saw a post on your wall that'll help with that). We all want to bring the best out of everyone!
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This is really relatable for me right now xD
Hmm, I am somewhat glad that it is.