Published April 20, 2016
Black and white
Levi's stripe
Only white
School uniform
Glassers and non-glassers
Fair's date pending
On table
On ISTAARC.
Phones and menu books
"His his whose whose"
Olympiad history
Scared participants
Head-banging music
Crowd's noise
Fair's date pending
On ISTAARC
On table.
Group selfies!!!!!!!
Shareit sharing
A wanna-be photographer
With DSLR
Chicks click-picks
Again Shareit
YWS posting??!!! :P
Still...
Fair's date pending
On ISTAARC
On table.
Boys> Girls
Boys talk much
Girls less
This is also possible.
*SIGH*
Two birds
PENNYLESS
BIGGER SIGHHHHH.
Still..
Fair's date is pending
On table
On ISTAARC.
Small debates
HEADACHE
Hot coffee
Seriously? -_-
Bro, it's summer already
Mer's cafe
Damn, it sucks
Boy's words
Chicks harassed
Legs and shoes
All in boys' attention
Fup....
Boys' still stuck
Chicks the same
Still pending
The fair's date
On table
On ISTAARC.
Hot coffee
Somehow digested
No solid food yet...
Stomach growls
Why is the VP such an ass????
He can't even decide
The fair's date -_-
The poet changes seat
Takes group pic
Takes LEG"S pic :P
Still..
Fair's date pending..
Damn those panel members!!!!
Finally, the AGS waves
Time to leave the fup meeting.
Poet folds the poem-paper
Tucks in the pocket
"ByEEE!" to the seniors
"-_- bye" to the juniors..
Finally, the fup meeting is over....
With the fair date still pending.
Still....
*relieved*
Note: ISTAARC is the name of our school's science and technology club. I am the Office Secretory of it. ^-^
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Greetings!
First thing first... I totally connected to this! It's like I see this poem in the recommendation lists and no sooner I open it... BOOM! O.o I get to read about something I've gone through quite a lot of time... Seriously dude this was awesome! The flow is also quite good and the seen setting was quite great... I could actually imagine u sitting at the head of a conference table wid a lot of dorks sitting around u...
Awesome work!
FD46~
#DANISNOTONFIRE
Dan is definitely on fire and so is Phil. XD
I liked the poem, but it was confusing to me and I lost the theme of it towards the end. I liked the rhythm of the poem and the fast paced parts of it, but some parts of it just turned me off of the poem and made me want to stop reading it. The one thing that made me keep reading it was the repeation of the words that meant that the fair was still pending a date. Personally that's what kept me reading.
~PoeticCowboy
Oh, I am sorry that my poem made you feel thus. Maybe it turned out so cus I myself was feeling so bored. If you go to my wall, you will be able to see a bit of the scene how the day was...and, it was written during a meeting.
Still, thanks for reading and reviewing it.
Hey there I saw there was no review for this yet and decided to give it a try. Just to let you know I'm more for being positive and up lifting to peoples work. I don't want to hurt or discourage anyone. I mean everyone even the best authors have room for improvement. So good job. I hope to see more from you. Feel free to message me anytime if you need someone. Good luck with everything you may be facing.
*hugs*
you sound like my poem was very bad and that's why you only said that you don't wanna hurt anyone. -_- you didn't even how you thought the poem was. -_- *gets hurt* *cries*
No sweetie I loved it... I'm sorry. I said that because I've seen harsh comments. You did a good job and I liked it. Don't worry I'm really new to this... I'm... I'm sorry I feel really guilty now.