I try to forget you
Like a one-moment-crush stranger
I try to ignore you
With "How to kill a Mockingbird"
And I pretend to miss your words when you speak
Singing a lyric that was never written before.
But all of it is of no good..
Then I rush to my home
Close the door of my room
Inside four walls with two windows
On the floor where sun rays glow
Like sand....
I cry like a mad
It hurts, Ryu
It hurts...
It hurts so bad.
Everywhere I look at, everywhere I go
Everyone I talk to
They all know and they all show
That I love you
I have loved you.
But I can't make it
Sound like this-
"I used to love you"
It's not in the Past
You're still in the Present.
And the future?
It hurts I won't have you then.
So, I rush to my home
Close the doors of my room
Inside four walls with two window
On the floor where sun rays glow
Like golden sand..
I cry like a mad.
It hurts, Ryu
It hurts..
It hurts worse than anything.
You're the idiot, who made me smile
You're the idiot, who's making me cry
You're the idiot, who's turned something fake into real
But I'm the biggest idiot, who got into all this.
Now I'm trying hard to let go
But everything is reminding me of you
Even this diary where I write my lyrics
Has got a history of our texting.
Now I'm too scared for the moment
When I'll hear you're married and settled
I think this and I start to cry...
It hurts, Ryu...
The last thing you told me-
"Don't text me, I'm engaged.
Study seriously and try to be world best doctor
Best wishes"
I wrote them in pages of my heart
Now I recall them and I start to cry again....
I don't understand how could I be this weak?
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Such emotion. It's good for writing, at the very least. Painful, nonetheless. I can remember a time I was fired from a job and produced a piece of artwork that is now hanging on the wall of a cafe. We creative folk turn pain into art.
Keep up with the expression.
A good work is never finished.
--MS
Such emotion. It's good for writing, at the very least. Painful, nonetheless. I can remember a time I was fired from a job and produced a piece of artwork that is now hanging on the wall of a cafe. We creative folk turn pain into art.
Keep up with the expression.
A good work is never finished.
--MS
I agree with ya, and, that's why i appreciate pain.
I agree with ya, and, that's why i appreciate pain.
sudden deja vu
I don't think it's deja vu..it's real. FOR YOU.
On the floor where sun rays glow
Like sand....
I cry like a mad
is better like this
On the floor where sun rays glow
Like sand....
I cry like a mad MAN...
They all know and they all show
That I love you
how do they show that you love that person it confusses me I would fix that.
You're the idiot, who's turned something fake into real
But I'm the biggest idiot, who got into all this.
I would fix the last line and put WHO GOT MYSELF INTO THIS ...
other then that I think the song is amazing and that you should continue writing. I would LOVE to see more of your writings and songs. I thought it was very heartfelt and brings out many different emotions.
Best Wishes and good luck please continue your writeing.
Great review, Blue Raven!
The last time I left a comment here I was in sort of hurry and couldn't finish what I had to say so ami tumar worka ek bar aur review karbo....
So first remember that ami tumake bhalobashi... Actually all of us here do... So never ever feel lonely. And as far as that chagolarer bacha ryu is considered... He is definitely an ass and you deserve a hundred no a thousand time better than him! I literally wanna kill him oo idurar bacha! How dare he hurt you!!!!! :@
And by the way Tumar work khub bhalo acha! It's awesome...
I like the emotions put it in and even if I did not know what you were talking about (from the tag that you had made there) I was going to still understand it.I had a crush like that and maybe...well not that deep love and I was not admitting that I may like this person but still I can feel how I am relating to this.Everyone once had someone they atleast a bit liked or they still do like them.
The suffering and the sadness when this person is going to marry or even just have someone else close to them in sudden...that crushes you brutally and I understand it.You had put your emotions and feelings in work and it is understandable.It is very beautiful even if it is at the same time sad.
I know you are very good at writing poetry/poems and I know that from each feelings or event you can create a different short poem with your feelings put in it.Im so sorry that this is happening to you but..still you need to wait for the rain to pass so you can see the shiny sun and a beautiful rainbow in the sky again,right?
Everything bad is for good.
Keep on writing and never lose hope.
This reminds me of the break up I'm going through right now. It's really really hard. I just understand this so well, and it hurts haha. *hugs*
*hugs back* don't worry..it will be over.
Taha my lovely, my sweet little friend. I understand your hurt and your sadness. But as I have told you before, I love you and want the best for you; and he is no good for you. Please, don't take my words too harshly *huggles*
I'm sorry Taha... I hope you get over it, until then you can ALWAYS talk to me if you want. I'll try my best to help you feel better... *Hugs*
Don't know why... But can relate..
This is a hard time in your life, Taha, when you're still walking down an unfamiliar road, so to speak, when it comes to relationships and finding that one person to live your life with. The doctor was your first love - the person who helped you start discovering what love truly is. This is just the beginning of your life. You'll meet so many amazing people and make new friendships and relationships as you go through your life, until one day you'll find who you are meant to be with.
<3 Timmy
Awwh, thank you so much, Timmy. I will always remember this.
I can get over this only cus of you and all other amazing people here. Thanks to YWS.