Winter

Hey there dear! I'm Warrior Princess annnnnnnd I am going to review your poem, 'kay? 'Kay.

Icey, (I believe it's spelled "icy") silver glitters of frost, Pretty words!!
They fall, they cover us as we walk,
They hit me in cold, hard spheres, Cold, hard spheres? That sounds more like serious hail than sparkly snow!
They fall to earth as frozen tears, As much as I like this simile, it's sliiiiiiightly cliche. You know, the whole precipitation-as-tears thing, which quite probably began with the Egyptian myth that the rain was the tears of Isis weeping for Osiris. . . . But we digress.

White and shiney (It's spelled "shiny") blankets of snow,
And you're behind me where ever I go, Okay, nitpicky gripe, but why would he be behind her, not beside her?
We lay (This should probably be "lie" if it's in the presnt tense) as angels on the less green grass, The "angels" part is a very pretty little reference to snow angels. However, I would leave out the word "less;" it doesn't sound right.
And make a snow man till the free hours pass,[/b]

Timeless and traditional as the winter goes, I like this line.
I kiss you and my palms have froze, The grammatically correct (but non-rhyming word would be "frozen.")
I take your hands and laugh you know, The "you know" is kind of awkward here. Does it mean he knows, or is it just the whole "you know" sentence filler?
We may only have a while to go,

It's like ten years ago, you said to me, I would omit the word "like."
We were singing around this Christmas tree,
Love is timeless, as is the snow,
They stay with me where ever I go. ♥ Last three lines, very nice.

Hi there there are things that I like about this poem and others where I think you need some improvement.

Starting from the first stanza:

Icey, silver glitters of frost,
They fall, they cover us as we walk, the us next to the as ruins the flow
They hit me in cold, hard spheres,
They fall to earth as frozen tears,

...We lay as angels on the less green grass,
And make a snow man till the free hours pass,

White and shiney blankets of snow,
And you're behind me where ever I go,

Timeless and traditional as the winter goes,
I kiss you and my palms have froze,
I take your hands and laugh you know,
We may only have a while to go,

It's like ten years ago, you said to me,
We were singing around this Christmas tree,
Love is timeless, as is the snow,
They stay with me where ever I go

this poem explains winter very clearly and i love the part love is timeless as the snow means alot to me <3

Greetings I'm LastPaladin and I shall be your reviewer for today, this piece seems rushed. I shall review this by stanza so as to get all the good and bad out easily enough. Lets begin.

Icey, silver glitters of frost,
They fall, they cover us as we walk,
They hit me in cold, hard spheres,
They fall to earth as frozen tears,

White and shiney blankets of snow,
And you're behind me where ever I go,
We lay as angels on the less green grass,
And make a snow man till the free hours pass,

Timeless and traditional as the winter goes,
I kiss you and my palms have froze,
I take your hands and laugh you know,
We may only have a while to go,

It's like ten years ago, you said to me,
We were singing around this Christmas tree,
Love is timeless, as is the snow,
They stay with me where ever I go.

I enjoyed this poem so much especially since it's winter and the holidays are coming up

SakuraFallsSweetly♥ wrote:Icy, silver glitter of frost, I'm not sure this is the best, or strongest, line to begin with.
They fall and (cut 'they') cover us as we walk,
They hit me in cold, hard spheres, Awkward phrasing- the technical nature of the word 'sphere' clashes with the imagery.
...
White and shiny blankets of snow,
...
We lay as angels on the less green grass, How about 'yellowed' grass?
...
I take your hands and laugh you know, Huh?
...
It's like ten years ago, you said to me,
We were singing around this Christmas tree,
Love is timeless, as is the snow,
They stay with me where ever I go. I'm not sure what part of this is the dialogue. If it's "It's like ten years ago," and "We were singing around this Christmas Tree," add some quotation marks. If it's not I would add 'when you said to me' and then add the appropriate quotes.