You know what gets me the most? The fact that I don't know. The fact that no matter how much thought I put into it, I still have no clue what's even going on. It's not easy sit around and hope for the good to happen. Well, I lied. It is easy to do that.
What's hard is to make it happen.
I don't like being pushed arpund, feeling like an outsider to everyone. I don't like people. I like to keep to myself. I don't trust. But, I try.
I try hard and it never works.
The thing is, I trust you.
I don't like being hurt, no one does. Please make it easy for me.
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Hey Nike!
This felt kinda like a blog post to me, not that that's a bad thing. I sort of understand what you are saying with this, but there's not nearly enough information or details to give the reader a coherent idea about what's going on here.
It sounds like the narrator here is talking about how they find it nearly impossible to trust people, but there is this one person that they do. They sound a little afraid that they'll end up hurt in the end. That's about all I have deduced from this.
If you want to turn this idea into a more profound piece, I suggest going back and adding in stuff. Maybe you can have the narrator talk more about this particular person, or have them explain why they are so skeptical of everyone else. Throw in some examples or memories.
That's all I can think of! I hope this was helpful, keep writing!
Ummm I like it... I feel, kinda, it reflects something like you have put your trust in someone and this one cheated you or was not as much as you expected, then you started to feel like the world is over and your heart got broken or something such... well there must be someone you trust, that's life,,, it's a matter of time... there's a mistake "aropnd" instead of the correct word "around"...
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"feeling like an outsider to everyone. I don't like people. I like to keep to myself. I don't trust. But, I try.", "The fact that I don't know. The fact that no matter how much thought I put into it, I still have no clue what's even going on." ... I liked these a lot
Good luck... !!