Do you ever get the feeling that everything goes good and then, BAMN. Something crashes into you like a semi-truck into a house?
Or like a meteorite into Earth?
It's weird. I would know.
At first, everything was great. I was already in the mood, happy-go-lucky, more sure of the positive than before. Until I faced the truth.
It wasn't going to happen.
It will never work out. Ever. I'm sure of it. Why would it even try to piece together? There's no point. I went for the wrong angle, once again.
Great one, smart ass.
I hoped, and I believed. I even saw possibilities lie ahead of me. I should've caught the word 'lie' first before thinking that one though.
I just really hope I'm wrong.
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Hey again Nike ^_^
This felt a lot like the other piece of yours that I reviewed, kind of like a blog post but not exactly.
I had a bit of a harder time figuring out what you were trying to say in this one. It feels like you are vaguely grabbing at emotions and writing them down, without really including any context of what's really going on. Whether you're writing this about yourself, or in the place of an unknown narrator, it's difficult to grasp the situation based off what you have here. It seems like if you explained a bit more, it would be so much easier for an audience to connect with this bit of writing.
You started out strong, I thought. Everyone can relate to the feeling of their life crashing down suddenly. It was after that point that you got a little off track in my opinion.
"At first, everything was great. I was already in the mood, happy-go-lucky, more sure of the positive than before. Until I faced the truth.
It wasn't going to happen.
It will never work out. Ever. I'm sure of it. Why would it even try to piece together? There's no point. I went for the wrong angle, once again.
Great one, smart ass."
I felt like you were skipping around in your thoughts a lot and I got a bit lost in what you were trying to say, what your whole point was.
Alright, that's about all I had to say! I hope this helped!!
I know the feeling.
I mean, you hope that the situation will change and will be more stable in the near future, but it never seems to do.
that's how I guess It just is.