Hi Nike, I was drawn to this piece of work because I am called Alice! I think this is good. At times, it is a bit repetitve and lacks structure. And I'm puzzled as to whether this is a poem, a story or a description. I think if you group together similar ideas in paragraphs then it would vastly improve it and give it a slighly better meaning. I also think the character you have here is a good one. Perhaps it is you, like some think, or perhaps you just have a knack at creating good characters. If you do not want to make this into a description/story, I think you could definitely use the character Alice again. I'm sorry that I have reviewed it so long after you wrote it - I have only juust seen it. I hope this is helpful. Feel free to PM me with any questions!
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