This big thing. It's pretty big.
The world sees it, feels it, scents it,and even smells it. You can hear it as well. It's a feeling that no one expresses unless they are brave enough.
Or when they are sick of hiding it.
But that will never be me.
So, enjoy the fact that I'll be hidden in my own little hole. I'll be out there, but that feeling won't be. I'm just like everybody else in the world but I find that this doesn't need to be out.
The words are out there, you see those feeling roam the halls. They mostly disgust me because I hate it when they just block the hall simply to show the feeling. The sweet words make me wanna puke, the peer pressure to be perfect make me suicidal, well, not really since I'm not that kind of person. But still, it just sounds true to others and even me since peer pressure shouldn't be involved with this.I respect it, fine, because I may be in it someday, but when I need to get to class, you better move. That feeling means nothing to me then.
Here we go again, NO. I won't spill anything. Fear over powers me, and this feeling lets it.
I kind of have no other choice there, ha-ha.
If you want to, go ahead. I might just surprise you.
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Hehe. This did actually surprise me because I was expecting something not quite like this. It’s very short (which does make it hard to review a bit) but there’s still a very interesting abstract feeling to it. But, well, I’m not completely sure what you’re actually going at with this. I mean, I can see that it’s personal as you read it, that you’re talking about yourself (or at least that’s how it feels) but at the same time, I’m missing the big message which is really my big recommendation. If you work on making the big picture more understandable, then I think this would be way more amazing.
This line is very weak and it bogs down the reading, namely because you used “just” twice. I don’t know, but it feels too un-writerly.
I keep reading this and reading over this, Nike, but I can’t seem to find the big business behind it. Did you have a big idea when you wrote this? If you do, I would love to see it become clearer. (Or for you to at least send me a PM and fill me in.
~lilymoore
Hey Nike. I just came to drop a comment.
I like your writing style, and it's different than what we get to read here. Although I would say that it isn't actually a story. Actually it seems more of a first person character sketch more than a story.
Even though I loved the writing style, as I mentioned earlier, but I never got the meaning of the story. What was that feeling. In one of the paragraphs it looked like she doesn't want to be one of the people showing her affection, but I am not actually sure. What did she mean?
I get that she is different from the others, and that's what she's been crying her lungs about and telling us, but that was the end of it. I didn't get the purpose of writing it. If there was some message in it, then I am sorry, I didn't get it. The only two possibilities can be that I didn't get it and it was solely my fault or else somewhere you just couldn't make yourself clear.
Anyway, if you need reviews for anything else, drop me a PM or post on my wall.
Keep Writing,
Shrubs
Reading this greatly fascinated me. There are SO many different things one could assume about this piece! It's almost like a stencil for the common life situations teens and young adults endure. One could say it was about peer pressure. Perhaps even about individuality. When I read this, I asked myself questions. "Is that me?" "What do I fear?" "Is there something left that I've yet to feel?" But that's the beauty of it to me.
could mean many things. things Iv'e felt. Others, yourself the author. I felt almost like I was hidden, when I questioned myself. "Am I missing something..?" But the final line, made me smile. With my interpretation of this piece, I answered all those questions with a statement. "The fact that I still want to feel, and that I still think about these things, is that's so "big" to me." Curiosity; mans hunger for knowledge. I'm sure my view of this piece may be far off from it's intended purpose, but I'm very glad to have read this. Your work really does get people thinking. Keep it up!