Nike - acrostic poem

by Nike
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Never Gives Up
Is A Crazy Girl
Knows Alot Of Weird Stuff
Excited For Everything

I don't know if this is good or not... so review please!

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Animal
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Learned a new thing today. And this sure is amazing, describes you perfectly.

I love that this is how you sum up yourself, in such a fun, creative way. :) Makes me want to write one myself. xD Wonderful job.

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Lavvie
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Lavvie wrote a review · Sun May 01, 2011 6:43 pm

Hi there Nike. Lavvi in to review.

I realize this is one of those poems where you write a word or line for each letter of a word or name. However, I, personally, find it to be a rather childish poetry format. I did these in grade two for our school's yearbook. It's an old concept, and not very deep, either.

If you insist on this as a poem, perhaps be a little more descriptive and expand your vocabulary to more detailing words.

Yours,
Lavvi

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tinkembell
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Acrostic poems are really cool, and well I loved this one. ^_^

I had to do them in school about four years ago, and they were all to do with animals, so people would just do things like this:

Dog
Orange tail
Good friend

you know, not much description, giving it away in the first line?
Well, you didn't do that :) I mean, you could of gone:

Nike
Is
Kooky and almighty
Earth Queen

Spoiler
I know, you loved it, right? :D
And you didn't, you didn't take the simple/easy option, which is brilliant.
However - like others suggested - I would like to see you expand on the lines a bit more, make it more interesting for the reader. I realise there are only four letters in nike, but you could make those four lines a LOT longer, and descriptive.

Also I think you should listen to shiney1, the flow could be improved a bit.

keep up the writing :)

~tinkem

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322sivart
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I'm a big fan of acrostic poetry, so I love this. The only real suggestion that I can give you is one that shiney1 already gave to you, is that to make it flow better you should probably want to make it one long sentence (which isn't so bad considering your poem is only four lines long).
Keep writing!
-Alex

I liked this particular poem alot. I like Acrostic Poems as well. It was the first Type of Poem I ever did growing up, so I always tend to see Acrostic Poems as simple and childish. But they really aren't at all. Great Job, as well. I see a few things that could have been impproved, but if you ask me, You can never really have a bad poem being that a poem is just the writer's thoughts and emotions on paper. To say a poem is bad is like saying the Writer has a bad mind.

The first thing I would like to say is that your lines seem to be a little too short. Descriptive Sentences would have been much more appealing in this particular piece. If it were more descriptive I probably wouldn't have to read it two or three times to finally comprehend it, but I still hold my position when I say that this is a Great Poem.

That was really your only flaw. Great Job. You've earned a like from me for sure. I like how sweet and short it is. Sends the message in a straight foward way. You have a bright future in poetry if you keep this up.

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shiney1
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Okay. I like that you tried to do an acrostic, as many people have issues with those. I for one love to do them.

I see that you were describing yourself.

Knows #FF0000 ">Alot Of Weird Stuff
#FF8000 ">A lot are two words. Plus, those are two no-no's when it comes to writing, okay :) ?

The sentences lack description and punctuation, so it just rambles on.
Also, it is best for only the first letter of an acrostic to be uppercase if possible, unless you are starting a new sentence.

Never gives up #FF0000 ">and
Is a crazy girl, #FF0000 ">who
Knows plenty of weird stuff#FF0000 ">, and is
Excited for everything


Just a little helper there.
Keep practicing!



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