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Did they leave her?

by KaavyaK


It can be a doctor, it can be a nurse,

It can be anyone who has to bear the worst.

They say, "Wearing such clothes! Don't go out wearing it."

I know what I want to wear!

Why are you being a critic?

She was wearing a burkha,

She was a nun.

She was wearing shorts and crop top,

She was wearing a saree, on her head there was a bun.

Still, Did they leave her?

No, you just said, you did it for fun.

Keep your eyes down, keep your eyes shut.

Don't look at us with that dirty gaze, 

I won't listen to no reasons, every time you say the same phrase.

If you know, there is something known as consent,

If you have manners, please don't give us creepy compliments.

Whatever your reasons are,

Keep your pride in your pants.

You don't leave a girl or a boy,

You don't leave a man or a woman.

You don't leave a child or an elder,

And still you are fighting your case, asking for shelter.

People are out on roads protesting, they are full of rage,

This time, not the girls, Boys need to change.


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Sun Sep 08, 2024 2:13 am
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Hi Kaavyak - I enjoyed reading your poem and would love to know if it's written with a particular case / law in mind to better understand what's being said. In the United States, people are often critical of school dress-codes that unfairly target girls and excuse boys and I think that is somewhat what you're addressing - though the last three lines make me think you're talking about something a bit more specific too.

Very much agree with the sentiment that how a person's dressed does NOT excuse nonconsensual contact or harassment of any kind! You bring up good points that women / girls of all sorts of professions, religions, and dress experience these things - so how a person dresses is certainly no excuse.

I think the part of the poem about creepy compliments is a bit of a diversion from the main message - but agree with that sentiment too.

My favorite line was "Whatever your reasons are / keep your pride in your pants" just a very snappy way of saying that!

I didn't quite get what you meant by "You don't leave a girl or a boy, you don't leave a man or a woman / you don't leave a child or an elder" do you mean "you don't leave them alone, or something else?

I'm not sure if having some parts in bold helped - the poem, but they did draw attention to those two sentences.

For this one, "I won't listen to no reasons," I would maybe change to "I won't listen to your reasons," to make it flow a bit more grammatically by avoiding the double negative.

Overall you did a great job making an argument with logic while still incorporating strong emotion into your piece! I can tell you care a lot about this topic - and it certainly comes through in your work. Keep writing about important things please! The world can always use more wisdom added to its voices! :)

Thank you for sharing your work,
alliyah




KaavyaK says...


Thank you Alliyah!



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Hey friend! What an empowering poem you have written. I wanted to stop by and leave a quick review for these lovely words of yours. Let's jump right in, shall we?

To me, this poem goes through a lot of criticism, that women face, for everything we do. I like how you started off the poem by stating that this criticism can come from anyone, those who are doctors are well established, or those who are struggling more. Doesn't matter who you are, but you can still be someone who hurts others. I also like how you went through the different pieces of clothing or appearances that women can give. No matter how she dresses, she is still told that she's the one who needs to change her appearance for other people.

I won't listen to no reasons, every time you say the same phrase.

If you know, there is something known as consent,

If you have manners, please don't give us creepy compliments.

Whatever your reasons are,

Keep your pride in your pants.


I really like this. I like how you use these simple statements. You state that you won't listen to these reasons that others give anymore. You were tired of the complaints and excuses. Even if they are coming from the people who are causing the hurt. I like how you give some more specific, but still not too specific examples here, using things like creepy compliments. That's a situation that I think a lot of people can relate to, so I'm glad that you included it.

I like how you organized your poem. You have those two statements that are bolded. That really caught my attention and helped me gather a lot more about the message that you're trying to share, so lovely job with that. The organization made it easy to read. You add these elements of rhyme which intrigue me, but it wasn't overpowering to the point that it felt forced. Overall, I enjoyed this poem, and I found it to be powerful. I always love your writing. Thank you for writing this and have a fantastic day!

Your friend,
Ellie




KaavyaK says...


Thank you so much Ellie!



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Hi there! Dropping by to leave a review since you don’t have any and I feel that pain too. :’) Let’s get right into it!

First of all, love the meaning behind this it’s a very strong message, it’s been repeated and re-phrased and taught so many times but many cases do occur still even in 2024! Although, I would like to point out, I find many women and girls are starting to almost humiliate boys sometimes just because some men are this shameless does not mean every boy has to be ridiculed and hated. Of course, I am not speaking in a biased manner and I am too a girl, but I find it sad that nobody says SOCIETY needs to change instead of blaming all boys because of a few. These days, even statistics show that men suffer a lot from depression etc because they don’t open their feelings. How would they when they feel sort of ashamed or feel they aren’t



supposed to? Only women are meant to be emotional and in charge these days? Why can’t it be equal? It’s stupid honestly how it’s required to tell grown adults that girls and boys are just genders and does not determine what role in the house they have or whether or not they should be sexualised. No one should be. That’s it really.
Sorry about the rambling but it’s really an annoying topic haha. It’s as simple as 2+2 for me, lol.


The actual poem is very powerful and reminds me of Naksu[sorry I’m just so obsessed with a Korean drama she’s from right now, she’s an assassin, very, VERY VERY, VERY powerful and she’s just a whole energy], the writing is so beautiful and it gives a I-don’t-give-one-what-you-think attitude!<3 So sassy and correct that no one can say a word.

I really congratulate you for writing this as even though it’s so HEAVILY mentioned that men are in a way depressed because of stuff like this, the actual thing intended by these messages is still not being conveyed.

Us women need to feel completely safe while being outside, is it not our right after all? Parents always take care of a GIRL more than a boy because of what society does these days. They always act more casual towards a boy regardless of prejudice it’s just to protect us. But, it is still unfair.

“ No, you just said, you did it for fun. “



This line definitely hit hard. It’s always for fun.
What part of cat-calling a teenager tired from school is FUN?!
How is it enjoyable to rape your own young daughter!!?
This is why girls will always be wary. You never see a boy in the news for being raped. I wonder why.



Overall, lovely, elegant poem and keep writing powerful stuff! Have a good day/night! :>




KaavyaK says...


Thank you so much Coffee!



Coffeewriter says...


:D




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