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Don't Frame Love

by KaavyaK


Love is not a game to play,

It's not something to frame.

I don't know what you want to say,

But I repeat twice a day.

I say I love you baby,

I say I love you baby.

My parents say it's not an age to engage,

But I don't want to be a sage.

Though I am still in a cage,

I want to go out on the stage.

Love is not a game to play,

It's not something to frame.

I don't know what to do,

I don't know why you don't feel the same way I do.

Love is not a game to play,

It's not something to frame.


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Thu Apr 18, 2024 4:07 pm
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wizartjay says...



Beautiful! it's almost like a song. I like that the poem is also a little peek into the mind of the poet, their insecurities and strengths both are visible. Great work, keep it up!




KaavyaK says...


Thank you!



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SofieR wrote a review...



Hey there, Sofie here with a review!

I really enjoyed this one. The rhythm flowed very nicely, as did the rhyme scheme making the poem sound almost like song lyrics. I really really liked the repetition on
"I say I love you baby
I say I love you baby"

Right after "I repeat twice a day". So sooo clever. I also really liked the line " it's not something to frame'.

Great job! Hope to read more from you soon!




KaavyaK says...


Thank you!



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yourlocalsatanist wrote a review...



I've seen a lot of poems but this one is the best.
Your heartfelt words resonate deeply, echoing the complexities of love's journey. It's clear you're navigating uncharted waters, grappling with emotions that refuse to be contained or defined. Your sincerity shines through as you grapple with the paradoxes of affection, torn between tradition and desire. Your willingness to bare your soul, despite the uncertainties, speaks volumes about the depth of your feelings. Love, indeed, is no trivial pursuit—it's a profound and intricate dance of hearts, defying logic and reason. Your courage to express these sentiments is commendable, for it's in embracing our vulnerability that we truly understand the essence of love.




KaavyaK says...


Thank you!




Treat all disasters as if they were trivialities but never treat a triviality as if it were a disaster.
— Quentin Crisp