Love is not a game to play,
It's not something to frame.
I don't know what you want to say,
But I repeat twice a day.
I say I love you baby,
I say I love you baby.
My parents say it's not an age to engage,
But I don't want to be a sage.
Though I am still in a cage,
I want to go out on the stage.
Love is not a game to play,
It's not something to frame.
I don't know what to do,
I don't know why you don't feel the same way I do.
Love is not a game to play,
It's not something to frame.
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Hey friend, Ellie here, with a quick review for one of your lovely poems! Let's not waste any time, and let's jump right into the review!
To begin, I want to say that I really enjoyed the theme of this. But the first thing that stood out to me was your rhyming. It seems like almost every word in this poem, rhymes with the same sound. This was very interesting and unique and kind of stood out to me. You open with a pretty bold sentence and statement, "love is not a game to play". Something about this poem almost feels like a song, honestly. I really liked your rhyme of play and frame. This really gets us right into the poem and the overall theme. To me, this poem is about loving someone, but still being young. Your parents don't really approve, but you really want to play this game of loving someone and being in a relationship. You feel like love is not this thing that should be restricted by other people, that, rather you should have complete control.
We keep going back to that same theme of love being a game. And in the end here we see that this person you love might not even feel the same way about you, which I can imagine is incredibly hard. Overall, you capture a lot of different emotions in this poem, some of which being anger for parents, frustration with someone who won't love you back, and also this desire to be yourself and love freely. Overall lovely poem, and I hope that you write more soon!
Your friend,
Ellie
Thank you Ellie!
Beautiful! it's almost like a song. I like that the poem is also a little peek into the mind of the poet, their insecurities and strengths both are visible. Great work, keep it up!
Thank you!
Hey there, Sofie here with a review!
I really enjoyed this one. The rhythm flowed very nicely, as did the rhyme scheme making the poem sound almost like song lyrics. I really really liked the repetition on
"I say I love you baby
I say I love you baby"
Right after "I repeat twice a day". So sooo clever. I also really liked the line " it's not something to frame'.
Great job! Hope to read more from you soon!
Thank you!
I've seen a lot of poems but this one is the best.
Your heartfelt words resonate deeply, echoing the complexities of love's journey. It's clear you're navigating uncharted waters, grappling with emotions that refuse to be contained or defined. Your sincerity shines through as you grapple with the paradoxes of affection, torn between tradition and desire. Your willingness to bare your soul, despite the uncertainties, speaks volumes about the depth of your feelings. Love, indeed, is no trivial pursuit—it's a profound and intricate dance of hearts, defying logic and reason. Your courage to express these sentiments is commendable, for it's in embracing our vulnerability that we truly understand the essence of love.
Thank you!