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Loving you in a few days

by KaavyaK


You are making an effect on me,

An impact which I never felt.

To me you seem like a genie,

You always make my cold heart melt.

They say love is a long process,

But you made me fall in love with you, within a few days.

If you would ask me out someday, I would surely say yes,

You turn the boring weekends into joyous Saturdays and Sundays.

Being with you feels insane,

Every word you say sounds magical.

What are you doing to me, please explain,

Once when you touched me, it felt electrical.

I know friends to lovers is totally crazy,

I guess meeting you and loving you is written in my destiny.

This journey is not meant to be easy,

But if we try we can turn this into a different legacy


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Sun Sep 08, 2024 2:48 am
chrysanthemumcentury wrote a review...



 

Grabbing the Kettle...



Hello, kaavyak! century here to review this wonderful work using my tea making method! Let's dive in.


Boiling the Water

first impressions


at first glance, i noticed your rhyme scheme immediately- which seems to be a common theme in your poems. it's beautiful as always! i loved how you talk about love as if it is something bigger than you, almost as if it is too big to fathom itself.

Steeping the Leaves

compliments


i loved the sound of magical/electrical and destiny/legacy! i would've never thought of rhyming the latter.

i also loved how you describe falling in love quickly- as opposed to the common "love is a long process." i feel as if this poem means a lot to you, and i like it.

Adding Some Honey

critiques/room for improvement


i don't think i have any suggetions? although, i'd love to see you elaborate a little more about your "cold heart" melting. maybe an image/similie?

Enjoy Your Tea!

final notes


i always love your poems, and this one is probably my favorite so far!

☆☆NEVER STOP WRITING!!☆☆

-century




KaavyaK says...


Thank you so much Century!



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Hi, it's theromanticchemist here for a review of this amazing poem :)
On a first glance, this poem just oozes with sweetness. I can feel how much affection is in this poem, and you convey that wonderfully. Although I've never felt a romance like this, you put me right in the middle of it.
The imagery made me feel something, and you did it very well! The phrase "cold heart" partnered with "melting" just felt perfect and I love how you turned that negative metaphor into something that is a reflection of love. "They say love is a long process" really shows how so many people think falling in love is something that takes a long time, but really it's unpredictable. I think you really captured the unpredictability of falling in love.
I have no idea if this is based on a real person or not but I hope it is, and that a love like in this poem can be real :)
<3, Meenal




KaavyaK says...


Thank you so much Meenal. Are you by any chance from India?



theromanticchemist says...


Hi, just saw this! Yes, I am, but I'm living in the US :)



KaavyaK says...


ohhhh ok




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