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Merci (Thank you)

by KaavyaK


Merci meaning: Thank you in French.

Merci you stood by my side,

Merci you are with me every day and night, every day and night.

Merci, Merci.

Friends are your biggest treasure,

Don't measure them, don't measure them.

Your friends will stand with you,

Without any doubt, without any second thought about you.

Throughout your journey, your friends are your key.

Merci, Merci.

Your friends will bend for you,

Your friends will spend weekends with you.

Your friends will stay with you till the end.

Merci, Merci.


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Hello Hello I hope you dont mind me popping in with a quick review. I will apologize as this probably won't be a long one. Overall, I really liked the themes it was very short but wholesome. It is just so to see someone celebrating community when this world is so isolated nowadays. I hope you don't take this the wrong way but the rhyme reminded me of those children's songs we learn in school ( like Marry Had a Little Lamb and stuff like that.) Please don't think I am trying to bully you or anything I think it aids the message and adds a sense of charm.
It was pretty well written and I couldn't really find any feedback to give. As I said before the message was sweet and carried the piece. It felt very honest and I could tell you cared a lot which in a way is key for all creative works. ( Finding pieces of humanity in works is why it can be so powerful.)

Good job as always keep writing and drink water!




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Hello, I am here to send a review/comment about your poem. Merci is a beautiful word yet you make it more beautiful writing this piece.

The first line made an impact of being catchy, making your readers more captivated to read the work. The repetitive words made melodies grow out of my mouth as I read each word, repeating them. The meaning is well-expressed. Your gratitude toward friends are written in lyrics which makes them lucky to be your friend.

Merci you stood by my side,

Merci you are with me every day and night, every day and night.

Merci, Merci.

Friends are your biggest treasure,

Don't measure them, don't measure them.

Your friends will stand with you,

Without any doubt, without any second thought about you.

Throughout your journey, your friends are your key.

Merci, Merci.

Your friends will bend for you,

Your friends will spend weekends with you.

Your friends will stay with you till the end.

Merci, Merci.


Thank you for sharing a very beautiful poem!

-AkuRashomon




KaavyaK says...


Thank you!



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TheLastWriter says...



I really like using repeating words to get your point across. I also like the use of French during your work, it makes it feel a little bit more like poetic in a sense. I also like how some sentences ended shorter then others to add onto the power of the words. It's very well written!




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Hi names 22Midnight
hope your doing well, let's get into it!

Merci meaning: Thank you in French.

Merci you stood by my side,

Merci you are with me every day and night, every day and night.

Merci, Merci.

Friends are your biggest treasure,

Don't measure them, don't measure them.

Your friends will stand with you,

Without any doubt, without any second thought about you.

Throughout your journey, your friends are your key.

Merci, Merci.

Your friends will bend for you,

Your friends will spend weekends with you.

Your friends will stay with you till the end.

Merci, Merci.


this was put to gather so beautifully and I love the french word mixed in, it differently captures a whole new meaning when you do that. it really comes out to me about the way it talks about friends being there for you all the time, almost as if it's telling you they'll be there even when you make mistakes and they'll comfort you and help you when you need them. It also shows me how important friends really are, and sometimes this is taken for granted and then you loose your best friend and it's only then that you realize how much they meant to you. Really nicely done I can see that you put a lot of effort into this and really I have no criticism for it today.

anyway that's it from me

hope you have a great dawn/dusk/midnight

See Ya




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Thank you!



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Inferno says...



Hello, my fellow writing friend!
This is a beautiful piece of poetry. It is very heartfelt and I can feel the work you put into it.

Friends are your biggest treasure,

Don't measure them, don't measure them.

I love that! Merci for this masterpiece!
Happy writing.




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Thank you for your review.



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TeddyButCheese says...



I am not into poetry,
but I love the rhythmic melody.
This is probably the only piece of poetry that I enjoy.
The meaning of lyrics are great too! I love the entire poem.
Thank you for writing this.




KaavyaK says...


Thank you!




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