Young Writers Society

this is okay.

okay, i didn't really find this funny. you could see the ending a mile away. the "netflix and chill" joke is basically a dead horse, and this is just stomping on it. the buildup is mediocre, as it uses simple and elementary rhymes to create something generic. there is nothing new in this poem leading up to the punchline, which, once again, is just silly. i recommend bringing in variation instead of making something so bland and boring to garner laughs.

thanks.

A poem of deception, though by the end of the third stanza I began to see the trick. I did like it, though, and honestly expected "I love you" to be the three words. Although, as tends to happen on this site, the reliance on current pop culture references is a bit too strong, though not nearly as prevalent as some of ones on the Top 100 literary spotlight.

The repetition works, as does the consistent rhyming pattern, which sort of reads like a sonnet would, making the poem interesting. Consistent punctuation appears, as does the humour which you have intended. The third stanza and its closing line made me laugh too. It just appeared rather like, "whoa, I didn't expect that".

Your last stanza feels like both surprising and a letdown. I expected it not to be love, on reflection. However, your inclusion of "Netflix and chill" feels like a joke with a great set-up but with an anti-climactic punchline. I don't oppose modern references nor archaic ones, but it would have been funnier if it were something of your own creation.

Perhaps improving that last part of the poem will change the entire meaning of it, but that is down to personal taste. The rest of the poem is good.

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Hey, InfiniteRectangles, I'm here for the requested review! Keep in mind poetry is not my forte, so it's not going to be as constructive a criticism as it is for prose.

First, I would like to say your use of punctuations is inconsistent. Stanza one is completely devoid of it, second stanza has a comma, third has a comma and a period, while the last has punctuations such as question mark and dialogue tags. Keep it consistent. For me, I prefer the modern structured poem in which each stanza is line breaks with punctuations helping them to make out a sentence(s) when put together. You can look at it more here.

Also, the first stanza is telling to much. I think the repetition of "Everyone knows those three words" don't hold a strong meaning to the poem since it's basically a statement of a known fact. Therefore, you don't need to emphasize that. Maybe you can change it around to "The three words are beautiful but now tainted" as the repetition since you're emphasizing what you're trying to convey.

Due to being a bit too much telling, I suggest you to put an imagery to the first stanza. Losing meaning can be imagined in many ways. Here's some tweaking I've made:

The three words are beautiful, but now tainted -
they hold meaning to those who utter them
but it weakens and weakens like lightbulb dimming
for it has been use too much and too easily.

Everyone knows those three words
So beautiful in concept, but they’ve been corrupted
Like a dormant volcano that suddenly erupted
Now they burn with lust rather than affection

Everyone knows those three words
That can never go back to the way they were
So simple and sweet, they make your heart stir
Now they might get you sex, but nothing more.

What exactly are those three words?
You should be familiar by now
But just in case I’ve confused you somehow:
The three words are “Netflix and chill?”

Wow! This is really funny! I'm surprised it hasn't gotten more attention! For most of the poem I was expecting it to "I love you" or something sweet like that, but I really liked the surprise ending! Well done! Really the only thing I would suggest is to not generalize your audience. Don't use words like "everyone" "no one" and "anyone". Also make your rhymes less forced. Other than that I like this a lot! Never stop writing cause you're really great at it!!

I love Rydia,. Hello! So you asked me to review this for you on my thread and so here I am.

First of all, this concept, where the idea came from, I think is a creative way to put it and also I was pretty amused by it. I think that you could work a lot on your execution though, just so that this reads better, if you see what I mean.

Everyone knows those three words

That can never go back to the way they were
So simple and sweet, they make your heart stir.

Like a dormant volcano that suddenly erupted

Now they burn with lust rather than affection

You should be familiar by now

Hello!
Snazzy here to review your poem! I have to start out, with this is pretty stinkin' good. The ending was unexpected, and well, funny! Good job with a great ending! Anyway, time for the review!

Everyone knows those three words

What exactly are those three words?

You should be familiar by now
but just in case I've confused you somehow

OK so this is my review

As a poem the structure is good, I like the fact you followed the rhyme scheme (abba cddc etc) I know its not easy I love the face you left the punch line till the very end I did not expect that at all.

The use of repetition of the first line throughout the poem gave the poem a sense of seriousness which was a great touch. The use of diction was impressive they helped set the tone of poem and bring out a sense of tension. This tension reached its peak in the last stanza and it was a great way to end the poem very ingenious!

Overall, I loved it, very simple yet funny. You did a great job.

OK so this is my review

As a poem the structure is good, I like the fact you followed the rhyme scheme (abba cddc etc) I know its not easy I love the face you left the punch line till the very end I did not expect that at all.

The use of repetition of the first line throughout the poem gave the poem a sense of seriousness which was a great touch. The use of diction was impressive they helped set the tone of poem and bring out a sense of tension. This tension reached its peak in the last stanza and it was a great way to end the poem very ingenious!

Overall, I loved it, very simple yet funny. You did a great job.

Amazing! You managed to make me laugh. keep it up

NETFLIX AND CHILL XD I didn't expect that (until the third stanza). I love this HAHAHA

Hi InfiniteRectangles, Felistia here with the review you requested.

Okay so I am just going to say that I am not as good at reviewing poetry compered to short stories or novels.
Now on with the review.

I like that you use the term three words and don't tell the reader what they are until the very last line. You used a lot of descriptive metaphors like dormant volcano, I really liked that since it made the poem more interesting. Now it might just be me, but I find the last line a bit of a let down. That is probably the dew to the fact that I don't get it.

One last nit-pick I don't like the last word in the line (Though I feel that their importance is weaning) I know that you have a rhyming pattern, but this rhyme feel very forced. By the way love the rhyming scheme, I know that it is hard.

That is all from me for now and I look forward to more of your work. Never stop writing and I hope you have a great day\night.