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Hey, there! I'm not sure how much of a review you want on this beautiful piece or if you just posted it for the fun of it. But I'll share a few thoughts, anyhow.
This poem reminds me of my parents, tbh. They both talked like this so much before they started taking their gym life seriously. I like how this poem kind of works through the person's thought process. SO MANY PEOPLE talk/think like this (*cough* even me *cough*), which makes this super relatable.
The first few lines started out great with a bouncy little flow and rhythm to it, but the last two lines of stanza 1 didn't seem to have that flow. After that, the rhyming was over, and it felt more like a person speaking. It's short and fun and nothing super deep (at least I don't think...)
Thanks for sharing!
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