I'm not
anything like I was at first.
I've changed—
my mind is in reverse.
I don’t know
why I am what I’ve become.
I don’t know
where this fear is from.
I can’t
promise you I’ll get better.
I can’t
tell you this isn’t forever.
I don’t know
if I’ll ever go back to before.
I don’t
understand me anymore.
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Nice poem about change and confusion! I loved the rhythm, and it's very real and "solid," if you get what I mean. This is very lyrical, and would be fantastic if it were to be set to music! The only issue I really have with it is I interpret it as saying "I'm not who I was, I don't know if I'll ever go back," but in line 4 you state "my mind is in reverse." I get that's for rhyming, and I'm being the nit-picky b*stard I am, but I feel it's kinda going back on the theme. But hey, "reverse" can also be interpreted as out of control! So really that's the only issue I see.
Thanks for the review! I meant reverse as in chaotic, but I totally didn't consider the more common meaning! oops xP thanks for pointing that out, I'll try to think of something to replace it with %uD83E%uDD26%u200D%u2640%uFE0F
...oops again... I forgot what this website does to emojis. that spam of numbers and percent signs was meant to be a face palm emoji XD
Hello! This is an amazing poem! I definitely enjoyed reading it!
One of my favorite things about it is the fact that its personable and relate able. Even though there isn't very much wording you can still feel the emotion that comes through. Like anxiety and confusion. Especially about growing up and new responsibilities and choices. Also, I really think that it accurately portrays the somewhat stressful time that people have when they are still trying to figure out exactly just who they are.
Over all, I don't see anything really wrong with it and the flow and rhythm seem to work nicely as well.
Thank you for posting your work! I cant wait to read more of your work in the future!