I Lost My Shoe.

I started chuckling when I saw the title so I'm gonna do a short review.

This is incredibly relatable on so many levels, not even pertaining to just shoes. I've lost so many things in my life that it's nearing the point of ridiculous, so ready this person's reaction made me laugh. I could imagine saying a lot of these things myself, notably the part about the socks not matching (I'm well known in my family for never wearing matching socks, cause honestly no one sees them, so it really doesn't matter.)

I will say my one minor complaint is that I had a hard time getting on the rhyming meter. Of course, I did eventually find it, but in the first four lines I found it particularly difficult to put one together. I believe this is due to 2 things in particular;
1. The word "closet"
The first time I read this to myself, the meter I had started to form immediately disappeared when I read the third line, mainly due to the fact that closet is a larger word than the two words you used to end the two prior lines, and it kinda just cuts the flow.
2. The length of the 4th line.
This takes you out of the short, quick meter you're trying to set up, because the reader has to process double the information. I think I wouldn't of had an issue if you had done it a second time, as to balance it out, but of course that did not happen, so it kind just sticks out from the rest of the short meter, and feels awkward.

Other than that, this was a fun little poem!
Great job!

~Maddie

Hello, ElvenJedi.

I thought your poem was hilarious. I like how it had a bit of a Dr. Seuss vibe to it. Anyways, I didn't really find any errors, or grammar problems, so I just want to tell you that I enjoyed it and that I hope you continue funny poems. I wonder...Did you lose this "shoe" during this day or one before, and how did you feel? As you were writing this, did you chuckle, or did you do it solemnly?

Did you read your own poem, after you got your first review, or did you move on from it? Were you scared that people wouldn't like it, or did you not care? I don't really know if you'll want to answer my questions, but here are some words of inspiration in case you want to dig into poetry:


1. "Today's pain is tomorrow's power. The more you suffer today, the stronger you are tomorrow."

With that being said...RIP shoe. You'll be found, but you've been through a lot. XD

2. "Do it or not. There is no try."

This is powerful. This is for YOU. Look for that shoe (If you haven't already found it) and do it with the knowledge of DO, not TRY. Just heads up.

That's all I have, so thank you, because it was funny...I'm not some smart butt, so I can't give you ten THOUSAND years of wisdom and paragraphs on why I love it, but just know that I will be looking out for your poetry~

Good job ElvenJedi.
I liked the rhymes you fit in, and I love how light hearted and random this poem is.
I don't completely understand why you included the lines about socks, just to rhyme.
This poem was very fun to read, and I enjoyed it so much I don't have much to criticize. I would prefer every line capitalized, but that is just my pet peeve with poems.
Overall, Great job.

Hi! Thought I'd drop in for a quick review.

First of all, your poem was very humorous and dramatic in the funny way. I loved it and can also relate to it. The only thing I'm disappointed about is that it was a tad too short, or else it would have been able to carry its awesomeness even further.

I did not find any grammatical error here. The poem was well-written and punctuation marks were used wherever needed.

Now coming to the actual content of the poem. The title "I lost my shoe", of course, complements the poem and gives the message to the reader that the poem is going to be a hilarious one. In fact, it was its uniqueness which made me read the poem. The theme of the poem was as unique as its title (though a little less humorous, I guess). Anyways, the poem can be considered nice, funny, relevant and original. But there's one thing I want to admit. I had expected the poem to be a little more funny. Nevertheless, it was a pleasure to read another of your wonderful poems. I liked how you became all dramatic about your lost shoe at one time and started blabbering. The poem, as a whole, was very funny, relevant and original. Keep up the good work.

That is so good. I love the fact that you took a situation that is very relevant considering it happens to me every day, and you wrote about it in such a creative way. I love the tone of this but as other's have said I would love to hear more. I wish it was longer. Where did you look for your shoe? Did you find the shoe? And a little part did not make much sense but it was awesome anyway. Great job and I would love to hear more creative poems.

Great job, I love the tone of this poem and the fact you wrote it about shoes!

I would love to see you make something else with the same tone as this one. The only thing is I would have loved it to be a bit longer.

I don't understand about this part

I found myself here,

but I can't find you

Why's everything alone,

Now I'm not saying to write more about who this 'you' is. Just it would be nice to introduce u to who 'you' is

Any ways great poem, could have been longer, but thanks for posting this poem up, beacuse this poem made my day