Hello! My name is LadyShadows and I'm going to review this piece!
My initial thoughts is the fact that this was definitely an excellent piece. I loved it a lot! To me it had a fantasy, dreamy like feel to it. I like poems that have that sort of feel.
Now let's review, shall we?
The poem was in my opinion not too short and not too long. There was a little bit of repetitive parts in this but that's fine. You didn't over do this. I also noticed that you took the time to chop the poem in parts, which is a good thing, because it makes the poem clean. However you capitalized each line of the poem whether or not a sentence may have ended. And you know what? I'm going to tell you what I said to someone on a prior review: Don't sweat it. It's a simple mistake. I do it too, and yet I've written for a good portion of my life. But going on, I've noticed that in this poem that there is supposed to be rhyme, and yet it seemed forced. Meaning you tried to find words that rhymed with each other and yet did not; these words merely sounded like each other. You must be careful of that. It ruined the blooming consistency you had coming on. However, I think I may be a fan! I will see more of your works. Keep writing and have a great day!
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