Hiding in a Corner

Hi ElvenJedi! DeepRoses here with a little review/ a slice of my opinion.

first off, wow. wow.

This is a beautiful piece. I see no grammatical errors and I think you split the lines/stanzas really nicely. This poem says a lot of feelings, it stays true to the theme of the poem and doesn't drag on. It keeps the reader interested. It grabs the readers attention and makes them want to know more about the narrators thoughts and feelings. It has such a sad feeling but it still continues to be beautiful. I think the word choice you used for this poem was nice. It wasn't too simple nor too complicated.

This is a poem that people can relate and identify with, it's a poem that strucks the reader in the heart with a lightning bolt of emotion and feelings. Something that is sometimes really hard to create.

The corner is a very nice way to express how the narrator feels. It is a nice way of describing what it feels to be in that corner and what the corner does and means to the narrator.

I don't specifically agree with the last reviewer, although this poem is not complicated, a poem does not absolutely need imagery or concrete descriptive words. But everyone has their own preference and style.

Overall, I know this is a short review, but i think this is a great piece and you did a wonderful job projecting the emotion and feelings. Good Job! Keep writing and have a great day

Hi,
Good poem. I hardly see any error or mistake.

This poem has this aura of something like depression or social anxiety disorder or like anything mental related. The interesting part is which you make the corner a place a better than the world outside. Overall, I just want to say, this is provoking and a fresh topic (although I know it is already existed, but you make it new).

What I notice throughout the poem, you describe this corner as something abstract and lacking concrete imagery. Look back at your poem, do you actually really use imagery? Do you actually show to the readers? Or do you just tell? I know you might be debating this matter, but I just feel that you're using words that really describe your poem. I'm just going to point out this particular section of guide that I think it suits well with what I was telling you.

In conclusion, I just feel that this poem is lacking good words or concrete words that can bring the readers to feel the emotion of the persona speaking in the poem. I'm going to link another guide and I know I should be explaining this to you, but I just cannot find words to explain it to you. Overall, good poem, but should be more addictive for the readers to read it.

Keep writing!

~Memo