A Single Second

Hello! Europa here
which you can see by the name
I'm reviewing
poetry now, I guess.
*ahem*
this is funny
because it's written
in poetic line.


So! You've definitely checked all the boxes here for a lyric poem. You have an overall consistent rhythm, your sound devices worked well and were very prominent when used. On a slightly unrelated note, your rhyme scheme was also nice. It was fun and worked well with the poem without getting in the way or seeming unnecessary. your images were excellent and impactful, and the poem carried a lot of emotion.

My two biggest points of feedback would be these:

1. Work on your musicality. While it was good, I feel you could have used more sound devices if you wanted to. I would read through it again with sound device in mind and see what you might want to change, if anything.

2. the last two stanzas at the end didn't really fit in with the rest of the poem's rhythm. You could fix it just by playing around with the line breaks.

Hi there Chaser it is @MoonFower hear I like this it is A great Poem of yours
To change the Earth I do not see hore you can change the Earth in a second it is a bit much don't you think that is all I want to say. keap up the good work by.

This poem has a very nice rythym and rhyme... I love the way you use language. I also love how you point out the bigger picture of romantic love, and how you use, not only personal language, but world language.
For instance "A single second
To change the Earth
Create the bright future
With the second's worth."
This is an excellent way of expressing the way a person may changed when their whole world is changed.
Overall, this is wonderfully written, and a fine example of expressing love's delicate and dangerous nature, plus the thrill and mystery that comes from it.

This reminded me of William Blake's "To See a World in a Grain of Sand" - one of my favorite poems. I enjoy the structure of the poem, as well as the rhyme scheme and the meter. I happen to think time is a monster, if it really exists. Time is power but we can't control it. We have the advantage of (kind of) knowing how it works, knowing that a single second is all it takes to ruin a life or be brave.

Hi!
I like this poem because it is so true. A word of advice to you: Time lost can never be found again.

"A single second
Inflicting scars
To pull a trigger
Now facing bars"

Those lines were very creative. I think these were my favorite lines. Really, I don't have anything to say, only that you did a good job. Good luck and keep writing!! *presses "like" button and follows you*

Hey Chaser,
Myjaspercat here for a review...

So I want to say that I really enjoyed this poem. I thought that your idea was sound and you had a very nice concept here. I couldn't really find any grammatical/spelling errors so that was also a plus. I normally don't say this but I did like the repetition of 'a single second' I thought it helped tie the poem in quite well. On top of that I liked the rhyme scheme (which that to is abnormal since I prefer free verse). Anyways, my one problem with the poem has to do with the last two sentences, the flow just doesn't work and sounds too choppy. My suggestion would to play around with the word flow. All around, good job. If you have any questions feel free to ask. Good luck and continue writing ---Myjaspercat