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I am definitely impressed by the way the poem is organized on the page. Also, it has a lot of imagery which definitely is a plus for a poem. Please note that I do realize that the poem is under the category of Dramatically Romantic and it was intended as such.

However, there are so many religious images that I found it almost impossible not to see a link between them and the life of Jesus or how someone might interpret his life.

For example, the crucification of a god, is applicable to Jesus Christ and his Ransom Sacrifice. The hurricane? Well, his last hours on Earth were indeed like a hurricane. The love? The Bible clearly teaches that he was being crucified for the sake of the Love God has for mankind. Honor or dignity? That also harmonizes with Jesus' death, resurrection and glorification.

The silence mentioned also dovetails with the fact that Jesus asked why God had abandoned him. Which might indicate that the speaker believes that Jesus was actually abandoned due to God's silence during the whole ordeal.

But there is something that differs significantly from the biblical message in the poem, the concept of murderous love.

Not saying that all this was intentional or not. I don't claim to know. Only that it is one way that it might be understood. In short, once a pole, crucifixion, a god, love and a death, a hurricane like situation are mentioned, the possibility of such an understanding or misunderstanding becomes highly probable.

On the other hand it can be seen as referring to a romantic situation that involves a rush of events.

Looking forward to reading more of your work.

Hey there Chaser,
Myjaspercat here to leave you a review.

First of all, in the description of your piece you told us that the poem could be read both horizontally and by column, however when I read it both ways I got a little confused with the later. Is there a certain way that the readers should view this piece if they read it by column?
-->That all aside, like alliyah said, the formatting is really neat and it really brings a sense of originality into the piece so kudos for you there.

Second, I enjoyed the imagery you had here even though it seemed a bit vague. I also didn't get why the second column was all in italics while the other two weren't. What's the significance to that?

Other then that I don't see much else to comment on. You have a pretty solid piece here. Good luck and continue writing.

The formatting of this is really neat!