Sweatshops

Hello, fortis! I'm emeraldfox, representing Team EarthBenders this Review Day!

I love this poem, although it does make me very sad. You perfectly captured how harsh the conditions are for children in sweatshops. You reminded us that these are not a thing of the past; there are still many children worldwide that must do difficult work for incredibly low wages. These children have to quit school to provide for their families at a young age and even still do not make enough. Then, they will most likely be stuck in that same sweatchop for the better part of their lives because they weren't able to get an education. You really opened some eyes by writing this to show how unfair child labor is. The rhymes and meter in this poem were flawless. I also liked how it was in first person. This gives a more personal view of life in sweatshops. You didn't have any spelling, grammar, formatting, or capitalization mistakes.

There were a few punctuation errors though, namely with the overuse of commas.
In the first stanza, the first line should not have a comma.
In the third stanza, the first line should not have a comma.
In the fourth stanza, the first line should either have a period or a semicolon.
In the sixth stanza, the third, fourth, and fifth lines don't need a comma.
In the tenth stanza, the first line does not need a comma.

This was a very eye-opening look at child labor and I learned a lot reading and reviewing it. Great job, fortis!

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Wow! It's yubbies21 here to review this today!

This is simply amazing, this poem! I love it's simple rhyme, easy and unforced, the mental images that they created!

I couldn't find any awkward wording or such in this poem, so good job to you! The rhyming was simple too, easy to follow and didn't sound like your worked the poem around the rhyme.

I love the repeated lines,

Tick tock. Stitch stitch.

Hi fortis,here I am to make my review on your poem
Agree with Knight Messenger here,but I would like to give some about what I like in your poem.I feel comfortable when reading your poem, just a little ripple when you use excessive punctuation here.

Tick Tock. Stitch Stitch.

I’ll work in the night,
Because money is tight,
At my tightly packed home,
Where they sit all alone:
My little sisters and brother,

I feel like I’ve been sitting here for years,
with no one to wipe my tears.

The Messenger Knight here to review for the KotGR.
So I liked how this was written out and the whole history of the Main Character's life, as well as how his boss is so crazy about getting money and how it is ruining the MC's life was done really well . . . and yet I have no idea what it is that the job takes so much time and involves stitching. Is he/she a sewer, or perhaps a doctor and it involves sewing up after surgery, and I just really don't know.
I think fixing that would really help me to understand what is going on. But other than that good job. Not a master for punctuation so I will leave that for others.
Keep it up!