Young Writers Society

Hello Cats! lovelydove here to review such a lovely poem of yours on this fine day. I just want to say, I love when writers such as yourself write about the society, the world today. There's a lot of stuff going on, and to actually have someone understand what is actually happening, and that they are actually writing about the world, is definitely commendable, if you can understand what I'm saying (I have no idea what I'm saying, my thoughts are all mixed up). But without further ado, let me get on with the review!



''like what do you mean beauty standards?
does every human have to be flawless?
they've looked in the mirror, then it was shattered''


The sad reality of many youths and people today. I often stand in my bedroom mirror and often question my physical features. I'm currently using thousands of skincare products just so my pimples can be non-existent (I currently have two on my fat forehead). Why can't we live in a society, where no matter how you look like, you at least can be friends than be getting called, ''chopped'' every day.



''like what do you mean girls have to have doe eyes and long lashes?
does every boy have to have a deep voice?
she's bought products until she faded into ashes''


Sometimes (actually everyday), girls my age, are wearing fake eyelashes, and layers of makeup. Even 6 to 8th graders look like adults. To be honest Cats, I kind of feel envious of the girls with big boobies. I'm flat chested myself. I wish I could accept that I'm pretty without makeup, or all of those beauty products.


''like what do you mean Epstein tortured his victims?
did he have to mock a young girl's religion and murder her?
his files are still being uncovered, the horror of his systems
they all disappear in a blur''


My mom does not like me cursing but, Rest in Shit Epstein.


''like what do you mean they judge you for being yourself?''


Favorite and most relatable part of this poem. WHY CAN'T YOU JUST BE YOURSELF WITHOUT THE WORRY OF SOMEONE LAUGHING AT YOU FOR EXSISTING?



''the world is in shambles.

we’ve lost freedom.

but we can never lose hope.''


The ending is beautiful. Even though you described all the horrible things happening in the world, there is still hope. Hope and prayers.

LOVED THE POEM CATS! Have a good day/night!

Hi Cats! It's been a while.
I like the voice you've used in this poem, like it's almost conversational but not quite with the slight rhythm that it has. It's fitting for a contemporary piece.
As for the themes, it addresses a lot of things we do see quite commonly everyday, and it will probably only get worse.

"they've looked in the mirror, then it was shattered
we're being dragged into something that seems endless"

Poetic, but what are you trying to establish here? I'd like to think that the mirror collapses as a sign that even these standards aren't enough, that it's 'endless', like you established? or as a symbolism for cracking under pressure? Not sure here.

"she's bought products until she faded into ashes"

Nice, like she's ceased to exist under the mask.

"like what do you mean friends are being pulled apart by opinions?
does an oath have to be sealed by blood?"

This is especially relatable. It's the smallest things that can pull people apart, and we are all humans after all, these small mistakes should be forgiven.

"the way we get treated is by our rank or positions
one day our world is going to flood"

Again, a little confused by what you mean by 'our world is going to flood'. I'm thinking of the flood indicating destruction or the end? could even be a new beginning.

"all humans want is utopia, nothing more to ask
they get what they want, but never give"

I like that this can have multiple interpretations, because 'utopia' is a very relative thing. Our current world is utopia for some, if you refuse to look at the full picture. Utopia can also exist for a brief period of time, like a moment or memory. Just my opinion.

Overall, I like it! Your writing has come a long way since your first work and it's only getting better and it's amazing to see.
I hope this review is worth the read.