my fingers are blurring into the wallpaper
drifting through places that were alive
my body's evaporating to vapor
choking chains make me wonder if i'll survive
i'm in a room that no one enters
linked to the cold, marble, floor
they're all slipping from where i can venture
after all, i'm just a girl to ignore
struggles weighing on me like a thousand stars
i've lost my voice and my final plea
thrown into the dark with nothing but scars
what happened to nights beneath the willow tree...?
i'm the moon, shining only when the sun leaves
the bridge crossed to get somewhere else
never asked why i wear long sleeves
distant like a memory because i lost myself
broke so far, happiness seems ethereal
oh, isn't it beautiful, how i shatter...?
don't they know how hard i try to be ideal?
i'm dust in a room full of chatter
interested in a blade to my neck
here to be used, then trampled on
my mind is a tragic wreck
what would they think if they don't see me at dawn?
they'd just simply say life feels brighter without me.
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I LOVE THIS SM(ㆁ△ㆁ) i think u potray alienation/isolation supa beautifully🙂↕️ like the feeling that as long as there's other(better) options out there youll neva get acknowledged even if ur doing the same things and whatnot as every1 else
never asked why i wear long sleeves
distant like a memory because i lost myself
totes has 2 b my fave set of lines!!(not sure if theres an actual term 4 that...tbh idk a ton abt poetry LOL) but it rlly highlights how that if every1 in ur life consistently skips over ur issues ur not able 2 make progress in either direction. instead you lose yourself
I LOVE THIS SM(ㆁ△ㆁ) i think u potray alienation/isolation supa beautifully🙂↕️ like the feeling that as long as there's other(better) options out there youll neva get acknowledged even if ur doing the same things and whatnot as every1 else
never asked why i wear long sleeves
distant like a memory because i lost myself
totes has 2 b my fave set of lines!!(not sure if theres an actual term 4 that...tbh idk a ton abt poetry LOL) but it rlly highlights how that if every1 in ur life consistently skips over ur issues ur not able 2 make progress in either direction. instead you lose yourself
thank you so much for taking the time to read and reviewB!! really appreciate it!! those lines indicate SH indirectly and the struggles hidden beneath <333
Hey twin <3 I'm bored so I thought I might review this!!!
First of all, what really caught my attention was your use of imagery and figurative language. I love the metaphor here;
I don't know why, but it just resonated in my mind. And again, here;
This line is different though, because I know why I feel it. Nobody notices you when you're just a speck surrounded by so many colors.
I have felt this way many times. I won't say it feels good. It doesn't. I love your word choice in this overall to convey emotion.
I'm so sorry I ran out of time, I have to go, but keep writing, this is amazing!!
-Bean
AHH DWWW THANK YOU SO NUCHH FOR UNDERSTANDING LOVE YOUUU <333 i%u2019m so glad you enjoyed twinnn
ilyt <333