Teenager

Sigh. I love when people make relatable poems that I can relate to. This poem, I think is about transitioning into a teenager. I'm a teenager, and I firsthand understand this poem. Let's jump straight into the review!

''Life used to be so fun, colorful, and lively

I was on the playground, running and laughing

But now I have no things to say

Nothing to laugh about, to make my day

Just staring at a blank page

Until it seems like I might rage''

The sad reality of having to do homework and no longer have time to actually have fun. I used to go to the park a lot with my mom, but now we don't even go anymore. I used to miss the park we used to go to because it had the cutest merry-go-round.

''I don't feel the thrill of school

And start fretting over what is or isn't cool

I start caring more about my looks

And threw away all my books''

I'm a book girlie. I love my books, but lately, since I've gotten my laptop, I'm more glued to it than ever. I was supposed to finish this awesome book series I was reading, but I haven't. I've also been more focused on how I look. I put on thousands of skincare products, and even when they work, I always think the next step is makeup.

''I don't want to; I'm shedding tears

I'm losing friends, yet, making more''

The sad reality of growing up. One minute, you guys are BFFS for life, but then like, 10 years later, it's like you guys don't know each other, or are having arguments.

''Yet, there are people here

Who love, support and care

For when I finally become

A teenager.''

I love how despite the overall poem was leaning towards the downwards side of being a teenager, at the end, you used four lovely lines that make people realize that even though you are growing up, and growing up pains sometimes, you'll always have people who love you, right by your side.

Overall, this is a very good poem, keep writing! xoxo, lovelydove

Happy Review Day!

Hello! This is a really great poem. I feel like I'm constantly reminiscing about childhood and thinking about the dramatic shift between childhood and being a teenager, so when I saw the title of this piece I knew I had to come and read it.

I like how the first few lines show how life was like in the past during childhood, it really adds to the dramatic shift of becoming a teenager. You can feel how the magic of childhood has vanished and drifted away to be replaced with dullness. The excitement of being a child and feeling like the world is full of opportunities is gone, and you're only left with the vibrant memories that once existed.

This is really well written, I really enjoy the comparisons between childhood and how you feel now, like how you're throwing out your old books and not receiving compliments anymore. While reading it you can really feel the sting of people acting differently than they used to and life not being the same anymore.

The only criticism I have for this piece is that sometimes your comma placement doesn't really make sense and can be kind of confusing. So I recommend that you look that over.

Overall, this is a really wonderful poem and I enjoyed reading it! I love this idea (I've written some similar things as well) and how well you executed it! Great job, keep on writing!

Great poem! i became a teen just a few years ago, and am shocked constantly by how long ago my childhood was. the first few lines, reminiscing about young childhood and then jumping to the current, very well demonstrate how quickly you go from being a little kid to suddenly being adolescent. a bit of constructive criticism, i noticed a few misplaced commas. "I'm losing friends, yet, making more", i feel as though the comma after "yet" doesn't really fit, as well as in "who love, support and care", there should be a comma between "support" and "and" (this is called an oxford comma, and its one of my favourite grammatical things!).
all in all, great poem! keep writing!