They Accept You More-A First Attempt At Poetry

IT'S PRETTY GOOD!!! FOR FIRST TIMERS AS YOUR MESSAGE IS CLEAR TO THE READERS WELL ACC. TO ME THE MORE TO WRITE OR READ THE MORE KNOWLEDGE YOU GET ABOUT THIS

Hello Cats! Genevieve here to leave a quick review on your work The Accept You More in honor of Review Month!

Welcome to the world of poetry! It's very exciting beginning to write and share it with the world! I'm excited to get into this.

I really enjoyed reading this work because the bits of rhyme almost give the poem a playful feel without taking away from the meaning and tone of the poem! If anything, it adds more to the encouraging message of this poem of hope and looking towards the future. Rhyme is something than can be a bit tricky, and at moments it can feel forced, especially when it disrupts the rhythm while reading. So I would definitely recommend reading your poems out loud, and if you feel like you're getting caught on a line or a word, then maybe it needs to be edited.

I enjoy how in this poem we see you playing around with your line structure! I do like some decisions you made in this poem such as "rain will cry with you" as it is typically written as "you will cry with the rain", but the switch between the subjects almost creates a sense of nature empathizing with the subject, rather than the other way around! These small choices can really emphasize the meaning of a poem or diminish it, and you did it very artistically in this piece.

A few suggestions I would make would be to make sure if you choose to put grammar in the poem, that it is done correctly and intentionally. There were a few points in this poem where commas were not necessary. The reader automatically takes a small pause at the end of a line, so make sure that your commas are placed in the appropriate spot. The misuse of grammar can also become a contributing factor into disrupting the flow of a poem.

This was a wonderful first poem to write and to post!
Thank you for posting this and I hope you continue to write and post. God bless ♡

Thank you for sharing your first poem!! it already carries such heart and honesty. It's always wonderful to see people get into different writing mediums to express themselves!

What I love most is the sincerity that runs through your lines. You write with a voice that wants to comfort, to remind someone (maybe even yourself) that even when people don’t understand, there are forces—pillows, rain, wind—that do. That imagery is so tender, almost like the world itself bends down to console you. It shows you already have a strong instinct for metaphor, turning everyday things into companions.

There’s a musicality in your rhyme, too! “command/complaints,” “judge/grudge,” “evil/illegal.” Sometimes it’s sharp, sometimes it surprises, but it keeps the energy moving. That rhythm makes the poem feel like a spoken encouragement, a pep talk set to a beat. I’d say experiment with line length and pauses in the future; letting some lines stretch and others shorten will give your rhymes even more punch.

One of the most striking stanzas for me is:
“Wind wipes your embarrassment,
The feeling of being free”
It’s light, airy, and captures exactly what the wind feels like on the skin—refreshing, cleansing. It’s a great example of how you’re already connecting emotion to nature in a way readers can feel.

And your ending, “You are the boss, you will conquer!” has such youthful fire. It feels like a rallying cry, like you’ve climbed through the hurt in the earlier stanzas and want to stand tall. It’s bold, and that boldness is a strength you should keep.

For a first poem, this is more than “fine” it’s a strong start. My gentle critique is to let yourself play with imagery and rhythm even more. You already have the heart of poetry: turning pain into sound and image, and reaching for connection. From here, it’s all about exploring and refining your voice.

Your poem shows bravery in both writing and in message. And that, in itself, is already poetry! Continue persueing the pages of golden words that you weave in your mind <3

Hello!

Hey so, full disclosure, I'm literally brand new here so I'm not really sure what the standard for reviewing is, but hopefully you find this useful.

First of all, as someone who is also not super familiar with the ins and outs of poetry, this looked pretty good to me. I like the lines like "Pillows hold your tears" and "rain will cry with you." That sounds almost lyrical, like a good depression song. I got the message pretty easily, that it's good to keep an open mind and not judge. Generally speaking, yeah, that's a good message to promote, I like that. The only thing that kind of caught me off guard was the last line, since it looks like it's part of the poem, so I read that and thought, "well that was a sudden tone shift."

On a scale of 1-10, I'd give this a solid 7, maybe 7.5. Pretty good. Nice job.

Hey there! It is awesome that you are posting your first attempt at poetry on YWS! I really hope that you can get some good reviews and feedback I think that you are really good at writing poetry so I am glad that you shared this!

People don't understand,

Your likes, your emotions, your pain

They shoo you off with a command

And always give complaints

But there is someone waiting,

Someone who doesn't judge

They can be your saving,

From the lasting grudge.

Rain will cry with you

Comfort from the fear,

The critters bear the truth.

Wind wipes your embarrassment,

Hi! Hop here with a review! I am not too good at reviewing, but I hope you can bare with me on this one Lol!

First off, the rhyming is absolute gold. Good job on that. It wasn't too long and too short; it was just right. That is pretty hard to get right.

This poem talks about so many categories of self-doubt and others judging you. But, it helps shine a light on the reader, telling them that it's okay.

When you say "Don't think your life is illegal" I felt like that went over the topic of SH and I am so glad that you put that in there because it felt like you were saying that people aren't alone.

The only negative thing I can think of is not being able to think of anything negative!

All in all, I really love this poem! Great job! Keep up the amazing work!


Love,
Hop

Nice one tho.

Nice one tho.

Hi Cats, congratulations for dipping your toes into the world of poetry for the first time! Firstly, to answer your question "What do you think...should I stick to writing stories instead?", you absolutely should keep going with poetry, stories and any weird hybrid forms you might find in between! Practising is the only way we get better and better and find more fun and interesting ways to express ourselves, so definitely keep exploring.

Now, onto this poem specifically. I think your poem has a great message, and it could be very uplifting for someone who is going through a rough time and needs to feel supported. I wondered while reading whether there was someone in particular you were talking to. If so, it would be great if the poem gave the reader more information about that person, and about the person you say is waiting for them. Some advice I've been given in the past is to be specific and to show, not tell. I still struggle with this sometimes! For this poem, that might mean describing what has happened to the person you are speaking to - maybe just one scene, or a few small details. Perhaps sensory details, so what do they see, hear, smell, when they are upset and when they are feeling more hopeful? Knowing more about what the person has been through would help the reader connect more to the poem and perhaps relate to it even more closely. It's a great first poem, as a reader I just want to know more! Well done.