Puppeteer, puppeteer,
where have you gone?
you said you'll be back for me
but it's been long
Puppeteer, puppeteer,
where have you been?
when I wanted to end it all
you've clawed my eyes, so I can't see
Puppeteer, puppeteer,
I'm sorry, I apologize
that's what I always do
but I saw past your sweet little lies
Puppeteer, puppeteer,
using my health to win me over
you never even cared before
blaming others if you fail to cover
Puppeteer, puppeteer,
you have the greed they talked about
you are the temptation snake
for you to hear, I had to shout
Puppeteer, puppeteer,
I couldn't grant what you demand
and I still think of you often
I wish I could say sorry, but I can't
Puppeteer, puppeteer,
sometimes I feel guilty for leaving you
but no door was opened for me
so now the strings are finally cut loose
I'M SO GLAD I MADE IT OUT.
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The repeated “Puppeteer, puppeteer” gives it this trapped, controlled feeling that fits the whole poem really well.
I especially like the ending. “The strings are finally cut loose” ties the puppeteer idea together perfectly, and then the final line feels like a huge release after everything before it.
Some lines are a little rough grammatically, but honestly, that almost makes it feel more real. It sounds angry, hurt, guilty, and relieved all at once.
I’d give it a 9/10. The metaphor is strong, the emotion feels genuine, and the ending hits hard. Also: bananas.
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Hi, I really liked your poem and found it relatable. I think at some point in life, everyone experiences an obsessive relationship, either platonic or romantic. Some people likes to control and manipulate people and i still do not know why. it gives them some sort of twisted pleasure to know that they get to control someone and that they are more powerfull from them. We don't know what kind of people we will meet in our life, so please take care of yourselves everyone!!
Hello! Thank you so much for your thoughtful comment! I'm glad you enjoyed, and I'm sorry you had to go through it as well <333
Exactly, I think it's to feel better about themselves, like, my friend knows I'm insecure about my weight, and she said she was so heavy and fat when she was literally skinny.
And, she only reached out about my mental health when she needed me on her side.
Thank you for reading!
I have had my fair share of toxic friendships/relationships, and I know how awful they can be. I am so glad you made it out and chose to share this poem!
I really enjoyed your poem. It paints a picture of this toxic relationship and how it made you feel, and it has a nice ABCB rhyme scheme, which I really like. Some lines definitely still need some trimming or rearranging so they flow a little better with the rest, but other than that, it's a brilliant poem.
Using the idea of a puppeteer controlling you with strings to represent how a toxic person can control our lives is so true and such a creative idea.
i think what might flow a bit better in the last two lines: 'you said you'd be back, but it's been so long' (just personal preference, it's still good as is, but when I read it out that seemed to flow better!)
I think this stanza is the weakest one, though it has the strongest imagery. I love the idea that this person clawed out your eyes! But the last line is a little too long for the rhyme and rhythm to land as well as the other stanzas. This isn't perfect either, but I though something like: 'Puppeteer, puppeteer, where have your strings been? When I reached to cut them loose, you clawed my eyes till I couldn't see.' (though pls don't just use my lines, play around with it and see what you like better!)
'But now I see past your sweet little lies' flows a bit better
this stanza is so interesting. So this toxic friend used your health for their own gain? That's awful I'm so sorry!
I love the imagery here!
This one flows so well, I love it
A really strong image to end on, i was wondering how you would show that you left the toxic relationship and cutting the strings is the perfect way to show it!
keep writing! <3
Hello! Thank you SO much for taking the time to write such a thoughtful review! The lines that you smoothed over sounds so much better with the rhythm, and I would definitely use your tips!
I'm sorry you had to go through the toxic friendships, it really is such a bad experience <333
Thank you for reviewing!!
And I can see Lynnloud's review is really similar to yours eek
No problem! I really love your poetry! (and they had literally copied my review word for word so I am glad they tweaked it a little bit now lol)