~solitude through a broken heart~

Hey CATS! <3 It's always nice to see you around!

I read your poem, or song, or letter, and for starters, I'd like to say it's very cute and light. It warms just about any heart and it's definitely a message many need to hear/see.

Starting off, you dive straight in to these negative feelings, which instantly hooks in the reader, since most of them have felt/do feel that way. You form a connection with these feelings, and because it's relatable, it's a good way to draw in your readers! Following that, you jump into the message that it's okay and somehow/way they'll get through it.

Overall, you used these feelings to connect, and then build encouragement up in your reader, which is truly very beautiful and wonderfully executed. Good job!

As a tip, I'd suggest trying to work on the Rhythm. Tap your foot or hand and read it. Get a feel of how it sounds, how you intend it to sound. At some point, you might stumble over your own words, and that might be a point you need to adjust so it flows smoothly.

This is a tactic I use for my poems/songs or anything like that. It helps so that when my reader goes to read it, they feel that it all connects and it doesn't bump around too much, which can make the reader stumble and drive them away. If it's intentional, then don't even worry about it!

I would suggest using this in the paragraph/stanza that goes "Hey . . . but it's okay," because after this, on the second line, it feels like a stutter and it's hard to voice out.

In your second paragraph, the last line feels like it just doesn't flow. It kind of breaks the rhyme you had set and it feels strange. You can still use the line if the words are rephrased or moved around a little.

Other than that, this is such a beautiful piece! Good job and thank you for sharing!
Much love,
~ Taost

Hello Writer, I am going to write my review of this poem that you wrote.

When we read this poem, we can imagine a hand on the writer's shudder. This hand acts like a symbol of reassurance while also caring for the writer. While also providing a deep sense of empathetic for the writer. Through the poem, the writer expresses quiet suffering. We can also tell that the writer has internal conflict, and we as readers get to witness it unfolding before our eyes.

This quiet suffering the writer writes in this poem is shown through the words that describes smiling while feeling the ache broken inside. The poem expresses and explains to us readers how the pain can rise out of thin air. We as readers can understand how confusing and heavy these emotions can become. Throughout the poem the writer asks questions. We as readers get intrigued and wonder what is the answer to these questions. Even the first two lines of this poem start with questions.

Which is a great hook for us readers because we want to know if the poem would answer these questions. We can also see throughout the poem uses imagery alongside the questions. The imagery helps us as readers to see how trapped the writer feels despite the achievements that the writer has no joy in.
As the poem continues we can see the shift slowly changes from pain to reassurance. When doing this the writer doesn't brush off the suffering, but instead it gives the us readers a gentle reminder these emotions don't stay forever and eventually they fade away. There are lines that are specific stating that despite these hardships, it's possible to heal and find peace. The writer shows more encouraging lines to support this when the writer repeats "you deserve more." This reputation helps us readers feel seen and supported.

Overall, this poem clearly delivers a powerful message about quiet suffering, resilience. Despite the pain, we can see the hope that the Writer has throughout the poem. With the questions, imagery, and the vulnerability of the writer's emotions. Allows us readers to witness the writer's internal conflict. The poem softly offers comfort and reassurance. We can see the shift from the pain to encouragement to remind us readers even during the time of solitude, healing is never impossible. By the ending of the beautiful written poem, the reader leaves feeling understanding and supported. This poem is very relatable and very raw and honest.

Thank you for sharing this beautifully written poem. I felt this poem touched my soul, as I was deeply related to it, and I appreciate you sharing your work with me and I was able to read this piece. Also for letting me review this poem. This concludes my review for this poem.