Do I like him, or not?
When I talk about him, I blush and smile
When I talk to him, it feels like friendship
We have some playful, lighthearted conversation
I don't try to act like someone I'm not
I don't act cool, or try to show off
I just sit back, and let him greet me first
Now I wonder, does he like me?
He says he doesn't, but boys hide their feelings
Now I ponder, do I like him?
He starts a chat
But I text him
Unlike others, he knows I exist
Keeps teasing me, patting me on the head
Friend?
Crush?
Friend?
CRUSH?
These feelings are so confusing
I'll wait and see
What fate plans for me
Put me on the right path
Because I can't do this by myself.
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OMG! This poem described me in the best possible way. And it is soooo cute too! I like how you have the part 'Crush? Friend? That is so adorable!
OMG! This poem described me in the best possible way. And it is soooo cute too! I like how you have the part 'Crush? Friend? That is so adorable!
Hah! I'm glad you can relate to my feelings LOL xD! Thanks for the compliments, and I'm happy that you like it!
Hi, Cats! Purple here to do some reviewing, and hoping we can help improve eachother’s work, haha. Alright, so this feels like a very relatable poem about crushes, and boy, have I been there, lol. First, I notice you said that you wrote this in a library, and I think that’s a nice detail. This definitely feels like just a raw product of some thoughts and emotions that boiled over, onto a page, you know? It just has that genuine touch. Also, I like how you’re able to describe the conflicting feelings here, and how one minute you think it’s a crush, but the next, it’s just friendship. Especially when you’re young and in school, it’s so easy to get confused in that way, and it can be not only frustrating, but sometimes just a total drain. In contrast, the positive turn toward the end, just waiting and seeing, and trusting in fate, was a nice way to close this off, and to turn this relatable description, into a little message or lesson for others going through it. A way to tell them, “hey, give it time, trust in fate, things can work themselves out”. That’s just how I read it, anyway, I wouldn’t be shocked if I’m off.
If I had to give this poem a score, I’d say a solid 8/10. Just a very nice, very real capture of some slice of life struggles. Very nice! 👍
Omg how come I forgot to reply ToT
Thank you so much for your feedback and I%u2019m so glad you enjoyed!!!
Haha, no problem. Probably the heat of Review Day. You are very welcome!
Hello, I know how to feels to not know if what you are feeling is a crush forming, or if you are simply just having platonic feelings. It is very hard to decide what to do so you put your path in the hands of faith. Some recommendations I have for your writing is a little more punctuation. It is a little confusing on how to read it since there are a lot of commas and no periods. So it can be difficult to tell where the sentence is supposed to end, you also probably don;t need so many commas. Another suggestion that could help is the formatting. Instead of breaking the words up so much you can do it only every so often. Other than all of that I like your writing. Keep it up!
Thanks so much for your review, and amazing feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed!