Once upon a time,
In a far away village,
Lived a beautiful girl
Who was also a mage.
She was different but great
From all her friends and mates,
Which always made them mad
For which she only felt bad.
When she felt angry,
There would be a storm
When she felt sad,
There would only be rain.
‘If only’, she wished
‘I could control’
‘If only’, she wished
‘I ever got loved’
Her parents left her,
Her friends did the same,
Thinking she was nothing
But only pain.
She was laughed on
And was pricked upon,
Everyone cursed her
And told her to move on.
‘Please’ she begged
‘I will do you no harm
Just treat me normal
And I will be everyone’s charm’
‘It is because I’m sad
My powers are out of control,
It is because I am hurt
That there is thunder and no hope’
‘If only could someone
Take care of me,
And treat me like a person
Would my pain heal’
But no one listened,
They did what they wished,
And stabbed her hard
With a wooden stick.
They thought her as a curse
And had hatred for her,
Only they never knew
The reality and the truth
The girl was innocent
And had no clue,
Of what the people called
A ruthless brew.
She was so pretty
That all flowers melt before her,
She was so sweet
That all the sugar was not enough.
And now that they killed her
Only brings them doom,
And will only cause them
to face her fume.
The people were warned
But they didn’t listen,
Now let them see the wrath
Of that merely witch.
She won’t kill anyone
Is what I ensure,
But she will do much more
Which you can’t even wonder.
She will be back
But for a mission,
Don’t mistake her beauty
Because she will only bring thunder.
She will revenge her death
At the deadliest of hours,
When the full moon strikes
The biggest of towers.
So beware all mankind
She will haunt you,
Until you are made,
To go to your grave…
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okay so basically this poem is meant for my story's beginning but I posted this separately (sacrificing my 150 points lol) for all the poetry lovers...who wouldn't read stories...hope you people enjoy it to the deepest
This was awesome. If I may, in my own weird way of defining things. It's like "Don't hate what you can't understand and don't destroy that which is different." It's like a warning that karma's a bitch and will come get you. Love it just love it. I also love how creative it is and the description you put in it. Keep it up!! 
this was creepy and amazing.
hey umaima
I am firefighter(As you know) and I am reviewing this piece...
I enjoyed reading it and got the ending too...yaeeyyy well I read that book's first chapter in which he reads half the poem and the other end it left...and I read it here...so I am happy 
Anyways It was really nice and the rhymying went great ...keep writing
Hey ummm....umaima. I will go one step further in the competition by reviewing your work. Well, I like it.
The thing that I don't like here is that it doesn't rhyme. Overall, I like it...
Nothing much to review but I will mark out a thing,
So beware all mankind
She will haunt you,
Until you are made
To go to your grave…
Hey! I am Asma and i will be submitting a review for your poem today...
So, to start with- you had some punctuation mistakes (again) and as i mentioned before punctuation gives life to your poem and can also take it away when missing. So dont forget it, it's really important...
But ignoring your "regularly" mistakes, The poem was really deep, and kind of creepy too so i liked it. And few errors are also there like "man" etc, but as it's overall good..i give it a 7/10 rating...good and keep writing...
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