Today when I sit alone,
separate from the whole world,
all those sweet and small times,
come racing like a furious bird.
Those wonderful days of kindergarten,
when we played with our alphabets,
the friends which are never seen now
and the cute rubber pets.
Where when the lunch break started
a loud roar of happiness was seen,
and when Maths ended
a relief was beamed.
Then came the middle school
where we played our pranks,
had many cat fights
and tip-toed our ranks.
Where one discipline note
felt like the world's end,
and once a teacher's scolding
made a come back of our sense.
Then came the high school
when finally we became teenagers,
made a lot of friends
and a million haters.
Eating between the classes,
Sleeping between the lectures,
discussing our goals,
one doctor, one engineer and one a teacher.
Finally we chose our destiny
That's when we reached the semi-final stage,
We put our naughty acts in our pockets
and walked towards a new image.
In college we bunked almost all our classes
did every crazy thing within our reach
studied hard in the last days
to get a 30 at least.
Then came the last stage,
after which we would be free
we burned the midnight oil
so that we wouldn't be left alone in a tree
After this is what I do not know
as I have yet to experience it
But till now life's been great
as I have had a dozen memories added to it.
Umaima
Really good grammer and great words! i actually think this is an amazing poem and your a great writer! i love the rhyming tecniques............ I think you are an excellent writer and your words have lots of meaning. i think that you are a really good writer and i feel like you have wrote this from the heart 
excellent! i would like to read more of your wonderful work thankyou for giving me the pleasure to read this xxx
LOL 
When did my best friend become such a great poet? 
And I can totally relate to this!
You know what? By the title of this poem . . . you reminded me of our childhood together Seriously! How do you do that?
great ! great structure and use of words. I love the way! its excellent and good use of adjectives. i want to read more of your excellent work! your such a great writer and i want to read more of your fantastic work! i love they its set out and i love the way you have used speech and punctuation. Please post more of your work and give everybody the pleasure of reading it!
I love this. Its excellent and so lovely. love the punctuation and and the structure. Its really good and please post more stuff and give everyone the pleasure to read your excellent work because personaly i think your a great writer and more of your work should be read because i think people will enjoy just like i did
I loved it because its the kind of poem that everyone can relate to. I liked how you made it really personal and at the same time relatable.
The last part where it's like
"After this is what I do not know
as i have yet to experience yet
But till now life's been great
as I have had a dozen memories too so far."
is really good because it kind of summarizes the whole poem.
great work! keep it up!!
This is good . I would just like to point out some spelling mistakes that I have picked up . " kinder-garten " could be written as one word but I guess you could leave it as it is . "hapiness" is meant to be "happiness" .
I would have used "earned" instead of "urned" . Other than that , I found this poem so relatable . I think every person could relate in some way to most of these memories .
Good writing .
Hello there, just wanted to review this. I noticed a few spelling errors.
a loud roar of hapiness was seen, - happiness
That's when we reached the semi-final stage,
We put our naughty acts in our pockets
and walked towards a new image - this is kind of slant rhyme, which works. I like the wording of the lines.
In colledge we bunked almost all our classes - college
did every crazy thing within my reach - you should probably say our instead of mine, since you've been talking about a group rather than yourself throughout the poem.
to get atleast a 30. - I think if you said " to get a 30 at least" it would rhyme and sound better.
we urned the midnight oil - burned?
as i have yet to experience yet - used the word yet twice in this sentence.
After this is what I do not know
as i have yet to experience yet
But till now life's been great
as I have had a dozen memories too so far. - I see you kind of gave up on rhyming in this last stanza, it kind of wreaks it for the reader.
Other than that lovely poem. Keep writing!
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