z
  • Home

Young Writers Society


E - Everyone

LOVE chapter II

by umaima


chapter 2

“What is she doing here?” he asked looking with an intensity of heat in his eyes that could have burned the whole place out but wasn’t that the question I had to ask him. I was too shocked to see him here so I couldn’t reply; I mean come on, why did it had to be him? I had just remembered the incident that happened last year when I misunderstood him for someone else and had slapped him in front of the whole crowed sitting in the cafeteria shouting “I loved you, how could you do this to me when I worked so hard to be as good as you are” Of course I didn’t love him. To be honest I didn’t even know who he was, THEN. And it wasn’t entirely my fault….my friends had given me that dare though they meant it for someone else. There was a kind of an awkward silence that I sensed in the cafeteria which I really couldn’t understand that time but later it turned out that he was the type of a guy who ‘never dated a girl and always was loved by girls’. The type who had looks as well as brain. That time if it hadn’t for the bell to ring and Mister Spenser to come in (our school’s discipline in charge) I couldn’t have escaped without getting him to say anything to me or been embarrassed completely.

Everyone that day stared at us with bulging eyes. I never had the intension to attract people towards it, it just turned out that way when I didn’t even shout loudly. And here I was again facing him. I had avoided him from since the ‘incident’ and actually people don’t even remember it now (I guess), except us that is.

“You guys didn’t tell me you opened a sanatorium” he said interrupting my thoughts. Fewh thank goodness he didn’t say anything about the incident…..wait a second

“SANATORIUM” i shouted looking at him with the most disgusting look I had ever given anyone “seriously…”

“Frank is that how you speak to your guests? Mind your language dear by the way you both know each other?” Aunt Angelina Interrupted and then asked “oh this is so exciting, so how do you know each other”

He looked at me and I returned his stare. Please don’t say anything, please “long story” he said, Thank God

The atmosphere was really quite and weird for a second or two while I and frank kept staring at each other then Uncle Paul cut it off “son, why don’t you join us now” he said. Frank and me still stared at each other, maybe he too recalled what had happened, I thought

“I lost my appetite dad, Thanks to someone that is” he said eyeing me while doing so and then I watched him go upstairs ‘Really is that all you got?’ I wanted to ask him only I couldn’t do that at least not in front of uncle and aunt

“Don’t let him bother you Suzan, he is moody and can be rude sometimes…some of the things he picked up from his father” uncle Paul grins at aunt’s comment, If it hadn’t for Frank to show up his face today I would probably have laughed right now “Now let’s have dinner”

“Thanks aunt but I just remembered that…I…well I had some work so I got to go” I lied and saying this took my black coat and headed outside. I unlocked my blue cycle which mom had bought me last week. You might be thinking that why would a 17 year old girl ride a cycle instead of driving her very own car, well basically I didn’t pass my license test yet. I might have been the only girl who tried like 8 times and still didn’t pass her license test.

I was heading towards the sea shore, my personal hangout when things go wrong, way wrong than I anticipate them too. The sea is like my best friend. When ever anything unexpected or horrible happened I would talk all of it out to it.

The wind was furious today. I guess it was also annoyed by something like I am. Seriously, first my mom forcing me and then Frank…I get goose bumps whenever I think I am going to live with him, my only hater I guess for a month or maybe more. The person in front of whom i felt so embarrassed because he never took revenge for what I did. In fact he never even spoke to me. I had like insulted him in front of the whole school (though I didn’t mean too but he still didn’t know that) and he had like never even talked to me about it. He wasn’t even bothered to ask the reason why i did that, nothing and this really haunted me for the whole last year. I couldn’t hate him because he didn’t do anything but I couldn’t help feel embarrassed in front of him, after all what I did was wrong and also the reason because of which his publicity went I little down though now it’s more than ever.

With all these thoughts revolving around my mind I knew I needed someone to talk it out too or else I would definitely have gone insane.

I reached the sea shore in about 15-20 minutes. It wasn’t that far from their house. I parked my cycle near a bench keeping my coat there as well and headed towards the sea. This place was actually beach type. It had low level water till a certain point and we can go inside if we wanted. It had rocks placed in the beginning of it so it couldn’t be called as one though.

I sat on one of the large rock and collected some small ones.

“Oh so you think you are all that you little demon” I shouted at the sea referring to Frank of course as I threw the rock “Why can’t you just take revenge on me so that I can hate you for something, I can’t even hate you..Why? Because you didn’t do anything. I was the idiot to do that dare and I was the one to embarrass you. Why can’t you just...just…ah! I don’t know. That’s the problem I don’t get it. Nobody ignores me like that, everyone wants to be with me and be my friend but you oh, you don’t care, you aren’t even my anti-fan. What is wrong with you? Are you even human? And you know what, you are driving me insane! why? Oh, I will tell you why BECAUSE YOU ARE RUDE, MEAN AND HAVE NO IDEA HOW IT FEELS TO BE IGNORED BY SOMEONE WHO WAS YOUR FIRST….” I paused but then continued “YOU DIM-WITTED MORON. CAN’T YOU TALK? ASK? DO YOU HAVE TO IGNORE LIKE YOU HAVE BEEN DOING SINCE THE LAST YEAR…i KNOW I WAS WRONG BUT YOU ARE MORE WRONG” I screamed looking at the sea continuously throwing rocks at it “Take this and this” I said throwing the rocks and entering the sea at the same time and splashing the water “Oh I will make you pay for ignoring me and causing me so much embarrassment” I shouted looking down at the water splashing it at the same time.

It looked insane but it really helps relieving yourself.

I was going to say something when I stopped as I laugh from behind me. I turned back and believe me the only thing I could do was hide my face and turn. It was Frank…

How much had he heard? Oh god. Why me? this is bad… really bad! He heard me say all that. I got really nervous

“You can turn now you know; I already saw your face Suzan” he said “You really need some anger management though”

I turned and tried to put my thoughts together “so now you started following huh?” I asked sarcastically

“Who followed you…this place is actually my...kind off my favorite.”

I smiled. Though I didn’t know why. It was just this place meant a lot to me too and since he and I have something in common…it was just something good though I didn’t like him now I did have a crush on him when I was 9 but not now. I hate him now…for no reason.

He looked shocked at me smiling. Like he really didn’t expect it from me “what?” he asked still with the confused face of his.

“Nothing” I replied as fast as I could. I didn’t want him to misunderstand. I didn't like him now though I did before but I definitely completely positively didn't like him now and ofcourse didn't want to mislead him.

I turned again facing the sea still smiling until I looked at me neck. My necklace, it wasn’t there…

--------------------------

hope you people enjoyed it...don't forget to like, comment or review it...chapter 3 is coming next week...


Is this a review?


  

Comments



Random avatar

Points: 1690
Reviews: 11

Donate
Tue Mar 19, 2013 12:02 pm
firefighter wrote a review...



hey umaima

I will be reviewing this as I just finished reading it
WEll I really enjoyed this part and the thing I loved most here was:

“Oh so you think you are all that you little demon” I shouted at the sea referring to Frank of course as I threw the rock “Why can’t you just take revenge on me so that I can hate you for something, I can’t even hate you..Why? Because you didn’t do anything. I was the idiot to do that dare and I was the one to embarrass you. Why can’t you just...just…ah! I don’t know. That’s the problem I don’t get it. Nobody ignores me like that, everyone wants to be with me and be my friend but you oh, you don’t care, you aren’t even my anti-fan. What is wrong with you? Are you even human? And you know what, you are driving me insane! why? Oh, I will tell you why BECAUSE YOU ARE RUDE, MEAN AND HAVE NO IDEA HOW IT FEELS TO BE IGNORED BY SOMEONE WHO WAS YOUR FIRST….” I paused but then continued “YOU DIM-WITTED MORON. CAN’T YOU TALK? ASK? DO YOU HAVE TO IGNORE LIKE YOU HAVE BEEN DOING SINCE THE LAST YEAR…i KNOW I WAS WRONG BUT YOU ARE MORE WRONG” I screamed looking at the sea continuously throwing rocks at it

I loved it and read it like 2-3 times because it was so much fun. I could actually imagine me in that situation and like this chapter a lot
going to the next chapter :D

Firefighter




umaima says...


really pleased to know you enjoyed it



Random avatar

Points: 1690
Reviews: 11

Donate
Tue Mar 19, 2013 12:01 pm
firefighter says...



myt review is above :D




User avatar
1125 Reviews

Points: 53415
Reviews: 1125

Donate
Sun Mar 17, 2013 3:58 pm
View Likes
StellaThomas wrote a review...



Hey there umaima, Stella again!

Alright so I know you said proofreading is boring but really it's so so important. 90% of writing is rewriting, about getting something perfect. Putting something like this up as your final piece is a bit like putting up preliminary sketches instead of a painting. If you want something to be good you have to keep going back to it, looking at it, being critical. If you don't, no one's ever going to take you seriously as a writer.

Other than that, I can't quite fathom why Suzan is so annoyed. She seems to be really overreacting, and the way she gets so frustrated and shouts at the sea... it all seemed quite extreme. Especially as I'd say they would have just laughed it off. Besides, why is she angry with him? She was the one who accepted the dare with the intention of humiliating him. It seems very weird that she is now annoyed with him when she brought it on herself. And sure, that makes sense in the first few weeks but if she's had a year to think about this... I just found it all a bit silly.

Anyway, I think I can see where this is going and it'll be interesting to see how you build the relationship between these two!

Hope I helped, drop me a note if you need anything!

-Stella x




umaima says...


hey stella,
thanks for your review and I will try to make that part clear...actually If you take it from my point of view she mad at him for no reason as I described in the piece and also because he doesn't take revenge but well I guess that's not so strong after all so I will just add something to it....and really pleased to know that you are interested :D



umaima says...


hey wait I got it...
The reason she hates him is mentioned here tooo....she hates him because he is the only person who has ever ignored her...thats what she shouts too



User avatar
13 Reviews

Points: 1234
Reviews: 13

Donate
Sun Mar 17, 2013 3:23 am
View Likes
Asma says...



nice....eagerly waiting for the next chapter :D




umaima says...


it will be on today....just gonna finish



User avatar
13 Reviews

Points: 1234
Reviews: 13

Donate
Sun Mar 17, 2013 3:21 am
View Likes
Asma wrote a review...



OMG!!!! i looooooved it and believe me can't wait for the next chapter.
And really like Frank's character, really intresting. And your way of describing was also quite good.

Frankly speaking, it was so much better than the first chapter.
Even though, both of them were really good but this one had way lesser mistakes.
You really worked on your punctuation but still spelling mistakes were there and somewhere i also found grammatical mistakes....

But as you improved in this one, i am quite sure you will also do it in the coming chapters. So work hard and as i said you can be the perfectionist at this! ;)




umaima says...


:D thanks asma...It was an honor that you liked it ;)




As my artist’s statement explains, my work is utterly incomprehensible and is therefore full of deep significance.
— Calvin