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this is amazing and beautifully written! the description you used is absolutely amazing. i find this poem very peaceful and soothing not very many people can write like this. i would tell you what my favorite stanza is but i think they're all amazing... theres great description in all of them and i did not get bored while reading this, the spelling and grammar is great too! good work(:
Wow, this was quite good, I enjoyed reading it!
You have a very nice writing style, you have an amazing imagination to write like this.
I really liked how you ended the poem with,
"Her song read the whole world
the meaning of life.
her name was Night.
She made the wind to a singing
breeze, the rustling leaves her harp.
the owl our guardian
the bat her warrior,
she sings all night until she takes
a deep breath and the darkness
disappears in a streak of light.
But she will return every night
singing her lullaby."
It was just so good, and a great way to wrap the poem up.
There were a few typos, but, who doesn't have them occasionally!
But, you did an amazing job! And good luck with your further poems!
Winter~
I really liked this! it was really calming and i really got the picture you were trying to create! i especially like the the lines "She made the wind to a singing breeze, the rustling leaves her harp." your writing is really beautiful!
I think it's very nice that we never really see what's coming next.
At first I thought this was a story about, like, a ghost or something!
And then, of cores, an angel (but not a real one. More like a guardian angel helping the person telling the story.)
And then I found out it was all personification (some form of it, anyway)
You did a pretty good job!!
Hey,
This is a very good poem filled with lots of imagery and description, there are quite a few typos so if you go back through and re-read it you should be able to pick them out, also some punctuation errors too.
Ok firstly I found the flow a little awkward, at times it was great like
Here it was great but in other places not so good. A lot of this had to do with the punctuation, meaning if you fixed them it would help the flow and make the read easier.
I like the storyline and where it went, it was magical and mysterious at the same time.
I'm really not sure what else to comment on, again just read through and fix up the mistakes.
Nargles xxx