Euphemism

Hey this is Coffee dropping by to leave a review! I love how the poem sounds, it flows together really well and sounds nice when I read it in my head. The line:

“There is me, who has learnt to feel these feelings alone.”

really makes the reader relate since most people feel that hiding their pain is better than letting their loved ones see or letting people see their weakness.
I also particularly love the line:

“We all have our crosses to bear.”

because it’s so true, we all have hidden burdens we are forced to carry and it’s our decision whether to do it alone or to do it surrounded by people who love and respect you for who you are. People who support your dreams, decisions and life. <3
Thank you for reading my short review! Have a good day/night!!

Greetings! I saw this posted recently an thought I’d drop by and leave a review! Please bear with me for just this while as I blurt out my thoughts in barely-comphrehensible sentences.

First Impressions + What I Liked

I like the way you use objects to describe hiding your negative emotions away from others. It’s never explicitly mentioned, but you can tell the various hidden outlets the speaker (poet?) has for these emotions. You frequently remind the reader with lines like “hidden away beneath books” and “never letting them out” that this is something not meant to be known, something meant to be kept secret. The main focus on the personified objects sort of “distances” the reader from the act, which ties in to the theme of hiding these unpleasant things behind more mild, bearable words.

There lies my mirror, on my bathroom wall,

it has seen me as I wipe my eyes,

and try to look alright.

Your poem is very relatable, especially this part. The number of times I’ve done this…

Areas for Improvement

Sobbing, hurt.

Helpless, confused.

Anxious, afraid.

Filled with helpless despair.

Happy, optimistic

The line after “helpless despair” is immediately followed by “Happy, optimistic” which disrupted the flow for me. It’s a bit jarring, unless the sudden change was intentional? If so, if you can find a way for it to flow better while still having the same effect, that would be good.

It lies there in the drawer, it knows the pain I feel,

when I fling it on the wall.

A bit off topic, but how do you throw the box at the wall without anyone hearing? I imagine it’d be quite noisy.

Overall Thoughts

Overall, an amazing poem that captures the feeling of hiding your emotions behind somethibg more bearable, like a smile.

I follow these words up with a euphemism :

T-T

I almost burst out laughing at this part, but that’s the irony, isn’t it? That something sad and depressing like crying can be represented by something as comical as “T-T”. Euphemisms at it’s finest.

Cheers (or maybe not?),
Horizon