i live under the curse of the timezones
oh yes i do
im always the only one online
im always the only one on the wfp
i wish people would realize
im not shy
im not antisocial
im not an introvert
im just cursed
im cursed with this terrible inconvenience
this terrible malady
this tragedy that shadows my every step
that darkens my every door
this curse that has worn me down
i stand now broken and battered
alone of course
this curse of the uncommon timezone
is heavy
is deadly
this curse is the greatest curse in the history of the world
after the curse that put sleeping beauty to sleep
like her i too
am asleep while the world bustles
but this curse is worse
it cannot be broken
this curse i hate
this curse i would never wish upon anyone else
this curse is the reason i miss all the workshops
all the yws events
this curse should never have existed
for magic of this power and degree
should never be wielded
this magic is evil
this magic is dangerous
and this magic shall end the world
there is one secret
about the curse
that i never mention
i live under the curse of the timezones
im always a day ahead
so remember
if there is race,
i will win.
Without fail.
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well now you have me
<3
As a lover of satire, this is fantastic! The humor is on point and truly highlights the playfulness of the poem. Another great thing about this poem is the shape. I must say I am a lover of creative layouts, but the use of spacing in your work is brilliant.
Thank you!
Hi there! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
(GREETING & INTRODUCTION)
Top Graham Cracker - I admit, this is super relatable and funny. Im usually behind when it comes to time zones with most of the people I know its morning for them and night for me or vise versa.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I don't see room for improvement, this is a pretty good poem.
Chocolate Bar - I have a lot of things to say. This poem is very silly and makes me laugh. I love how you repeated words.
Closing Graham Cracker - That is all i have to say, have a good day/night
Thanks for the review!!
OMG YES,
T ^ T
we live in neighbouring countries (and enemies since their birth lol) we could open a wpf for everyone cursed with the same evil T-T
omg yes we should! the wfp can be called 'Curse Survival 101' or something like that
are you free right now? lets do it XD
I am!
I've already been working on it actually, I'll post it soon
I deeply resonate with this poem, I understand your pain.
Much appreciated lol
I'm just going to be honest and say that not only I'm on a time limit but I did this for the points
sorry :<
but I clicked on this and not some other poem for a reason! Ill read as I go.
if you weren't trying to rhyme or form special lyrics, then I think you did good. the lyrics are okay, but if you were trying to rhyme, maybe take a little time in the future? there are many reasons to write a poem, and for all I know, it was in the heat of the moment and you just wanted to push your feelings out.
I get how you feel! the problem is I have starting bipolar disorder. the doctors mentioned something and everything. I'm not old enough to be diagnosed, but I definitely have symptoms. sometimes I close up like a leaf. the best advice I can give you is to take it upon yourself. message random people. sometimes they will tell you to **** off. some are toxic. some you just don't bond with in general. but you can meet a life time friend just by having the courage to push yourself out there. I met my best friend on here just by messaging her deciding it would be a bright idea to message me and ask if we could be friends after I reviewed her work. good people are out there. you're bound to find the right time zone soon!
well I don't know about "the end of the world" get your feelings out I guess. but its pretty painful when you have few friends and they all have different time zones or they dont have a phone number. but im sure that youll find some friend! it could be anyone. stay safe!
thanks for the review.
Nice poem written by the author.
First of all this poem is very funny
"im always a day ahead
so remember
if there is race,
i will win.
Without fail."
In the poem, the author first talks about how he/she is cursed, because she lives in a country where the time goes really fast (just how fast the night changes...no more jokes). But then the author suddenly emphasizes on how this time zone thing is a benefit for him/her, as he/she will always be ahead, he/she will always do things way earlier and that's how he/she will win the 'race of time'. Everything in our life has advantages and disadvantages, it is all about what you focus on, the good side or the bad side. The choice is yours.
This concept is very well explained by the author through this poem.
Keep it up.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.
Thanks for the review.