Again, I mistook locating for subduing, which was probably stupid on my part.
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Third-to-last review! And there's no grammar or spelling issues, so yay! Man, I love the sense of closure this chapter provides. Tejal comes in and wraps up a lot of mysteries and lingering questions, especially concerning the earliest chapters. The audience finally gets to see the motivation behind his chasing after Ellipse in the first place when he could have chosen any other, friendlier approach. There's something amusing in Tejal deciding to take an action movie route, but hey, he was a naive teenager in a dangerous line of work. What else was he going to do? Also, the phrase "Elliot Bei doesn't exist" makes sense now. Granted, I probably should've figured it out beforehand, since Ellipse's papers being destroyed in the Independent Titan attack has been referenced repeatedly since then. Still, tying that plot thread to that statement is a brilliant move, and I love how you explain it through the eyes, ears, and words of several characters. Aaaand I probably shouldn't, but I keep imagining Shell and Crane placing their paws on a desktop and aaaagh too cute. ;-;
Did I mention the discrepancy here? It's very entertaining to watch an older, more mature Tejal comment on his past actions. There's a nice blend of honesty and eye-rolling as he details the circumstances behind his meeting Ellipse. He even covers how he and his parents found Ellipse again, thanks to the public records of the Conics (which probably explains why Ellipse kept running into bounty hunters). But, despite the obvious criticism, at least he gives his past self credit; Ellipse could've beaten back Andra-Media in a lot of ways, whether hiding or not. By pursuing her and causing all this trouble in the first place, chances are they either never would've met, or never would've had the chance to become friends and ultimately work together to smash Andra-Media's control over her. At least, that's how I interpret "Or maybe that’s where everything went right." It helps that, in the ending of the chapter, Ellipse and Focci invited Tejal to come along - after originally shutting out Tejal with the magical power of language barriers - and present-day Tejal seems to think of that moment fondly.
Haha yeah, this is a sweet chapter. It reads smoothly, wraps up some mysteries, patches up possible plot holes, and provides valuable context. The descriptions are vivid and distinctive as either (I recognized Space Aspen - or was it Space Vail? - immediately), and contribute to the sense of mystery and friendship. Great job!
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