Crane and Shell told me later, after the trials—in both the scientific and lawful senses—began, that they had known most of the important details before Ellie told us everything. And by important, I mean the awful parts.
It was Andra who changed their minds about the job.
I remember having downloaded as much officially-released information on Elliott Bei’s disappearance as was available. There were interviews and articles and op-eds, and the most recent of them were all at least a few days old. Crane, in his usual gruffness, told me to be careful about publishers and bias, and Shell, with a flick of his tail, commented that I must have heard the message a million times already.
The Ink was passing by Neptune in all of its deep blue glory when I pulled up the single official interview with Andra Bei. Andra-Media’s news outlet was naturally the only one to score an interview with the celebrity, and it ran all of seven minutes. I could not decide if this was long or short; there were only so many questions to ask regarding Elliott’s disappearance, but plenty of other celebrities had interviews that lasted upwards of twenty minutes. Andra themselves had done a full segment on their first big album.
Shell floated nearby, curled up in a ball to inspect his pristine white tail for dirt, and his ears flickered the moment Andra’s voice came out, slightly grainy, from the tablet speakers.
“What publisher is that?” he asked.
“Andra-Media. This is the only interview with them I could find on the fold monitor database.”
“Restart it. I want to see.”
I thought little of it at the time. Shell made a point of joining me while I read up on earthling news, and had been the one to show me how to search for and download stories from station databases.
As the Andra-Media news opener flashed across the screen, and synth violins belted out rapidly changing chords, Shell maneuvered himself to curl around me and narrowed his eyes at the tablet. The opener changed to a small, intimate newsroom with Andra seated in a white, plush chair across from a reporter with a too-perfect face, backlit by a wide television screen.
The music faded out.
“Hello, Titan, and all our viewers out in the universe,” the reporter said in English, face sternly neutral. “After the disappearance of Elliott Bei, the lesser known younger sibling of universally famous singer Andra, the eponymous company has been relatively quiet.”
It sounded like bull, coming from that very company. Shell snorted into my hair.
“But with us now, we have Andra themselves, here to answer questions about their sister’s disappearance, and how this has affected them personally, as well as how the disappearance may affect the company in the future.” The reporter turned away from the camera and pinched his lips in restrained sympathy. “Andra, it’s an honor to have you on air with us. I hope you’re not feeling too under the weather with everything going on.”
Andra smiled awkwardly. I think they wore dangling earrings for the interview, but I could be wrong. I heard later that Andra tended to feel more manly when Elliott was in trouble.
“It’s been a frightening experience,” Andra replied, face still pinched in discomfort. “But I’d imagine that my fears are nothing compared to whatever Ellie is going through right now though.”
Shell let out a low grumble. “Andra is acting.”
That was a given. It was hard to believe that any of Andra’s public appearances were not scripted and heavily coached.
“Yes,” the anchorman agreed. “I’m sure everyone is hoping for her quick and safe return.” He shuffled a few papers on his desk and leaned forwards. “Now, very little is known about your sister. What can you tell us about her?”
Like flipping a light switch, Andra’s face lit up. “Ah, well, she’s fifteen. She’s probably smarter than me, if we’re being completely honest. I’m really proud of her, since she’s been keeping up with school work on the Andra-Media satellite.”
“And you haven’t?” The reporter quirked an eyebrow like it was a joke.
“No. Unfortunately it’s hard to keep up with everything when you’re always travelling and learning dance routines.”
There were a few more questions about Elliott Bei’s personality and what she looked like. Andra claimed that they looked dissimilar, but anyone looking at the two now would know without a doubt that they’re siblings. It can be hard to remember that they ever looked different.
All through the interview, the anchor remained stoic, showing only twinges of concern in the occasional twitch of his lips or a well-placed blink. “Now, everyone’s curious to know,” he said, as a prelude to a change in topics, “how do you think your sister’s disappearance will affect the company?”
Andra paused. In retrospect, this was a revealing moment. “I think there will be some issues,” they said, words careful and slow. “There’s the fact that all my music is heavily influenced by her. I think the next album will be very different without her hand, if she isn’t found before then. And, well, it looks bad, doesn’t it?”
The anchor tilted his head.
“I mean, you have a giant organization with influence across the universe, which isn’t something a lot of earthling corporations can say. And to have a teenage girl disappear? Well, it raises a lot of questions.”
“Mmm. Everyone has theories.” The reporter shifted and adjusted his cuffs. “There’s a lot of curiosity regarding the way Elliott’s bounty is worded. It implies very heavily that she ran away. What do you think would cause her to do that?”
I remember that Shell largely ignored this part. He and Crane already had ideas about those causes, many of which turned out to be true. It wasn’t until the next question that Shell showed any indication that something piqued his interest.
The reporter received a close up shot, and the angled showed in great detail how his eyes narrowed and his mouth pinched. “And how would you say this is affecting you personally, Andra? It can’t be very comforting to know your little sister is out there on her own.”
Andra let out a defeated breath. “It’s not. It’s definitely not.”
Shell leaned in here.
“I just… she’s very capable, but Ellie will always be my little sister, you know? I miss her, and I love her, and even if this wasn’t a big fiasco, I’d still be really worried about her being on her own.” Andra took a breath.
“Something is wrong,” Shell murmured. To this day I don’t understand what facial cues he put together, but he was correct, as always. “Of all the things in this interview, how is this the part where Andra’s acting is the most obvious?”
It would make sense for this part to be scripted but entirely genuine. That was my original thought on it, but once Shell made the observation, I paid closer attention. Andra’s careful stoicism turned wilder, and their eyes kept flitting about, never quite making eye contact with either the anchorman or camera. Their cheeks flushed, and the Titan accent to Andra’s English turned stilted, more like an American copying the accent than a native Titan slipping into old habits.
Shell curled closer around me, tails pulling across my chest. “I do not like this. There is more to this than a justified runaway.”
“What do you mean?” I asked, pausing the video. “What are we going to do?”
Pressing his nose to my head, Shell let out a quiet, reassuring rumble. “Ideally, we find her and see what happened, and act from there.”
- A Life Unfolded by Tejal Sethi
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Starting to get towards caught up now...
Nit-picks:
I'm not sure why I find this odd, but I'd have expected it to be "masculine" rather than "manly". Maybe I'm just really used to specific gender terminology, but I guess I have kinda bad connotations associated with "manly". Like, just kinda makes me think about obnoxious hegemonic masculinity?
Wait, huh? What happened?
Overall:
I'm not sure I understand the point of this addition at this particular time. Like, it's interesting to read, and it's all executed very well, but it's an interruption at a very key moment, so it's important to know why it's happening. My best guess is that this is something to do with the things Crane and Shell were saying, and that Ellipse was thinking they were thinking, in the second half of the last chapter - but since I was so confused I don't really understand the relevance, and so this becomes something of an odd intrusion.
As far as the chapter itself goes, though, I really admire your flow in the dipping in and out of what Tejal is watching. A lot of people would just relay the entire thing and save the characters' reactions to the end, so that's good. We also get just enough of a sense of what Shell is thinking - enough that it becomes significant and interesting, not enough to make it unrealistic that this is being related by Tejal.
The additional characterisation of Andra and the implications are also very interesting. Actually, they're interesting for the stuff that happened in the first Earth chapter, so maybe this wouldn't feel like an intrusion if it had been one chapter earlier, and would actually have helped make sense of chapter 61.
Hope this helps,
Biscuits
Ooh, that placement tip is pretty helpful. I tend to break the big moments--Fox has mentioned this to me as well--for the purpose of cliff-hanging, but I can see how it might be confusing.
k, I'm wiped out from finals, but I have the time, so I might as well write up a review.
Grammar and spelling stuff first:
Hrrrng the grammar side of me wants to throw in a comma in front of "though," even though the sentence can be read without a pause. You might be better off just removing "though" -the sentence would still make sense.
Have I ever mentioned how happy I am that there's so few grammar/spelling errors in this story - it makes it so much easier to read.As for the story itself, I love how the previous chapters set up this interview. Andra's efforts to hide the real story behind Ellipse's disappearance makes the interview captivating, especially as the interviewer prods them. Frankly, this reminds me of an interrogation. The too-perfect Andra-Media interviewer gives a vague response to Andra's comment on how bad it looks for the company, then points out how it looks like Ellipse ran away. It's like watching a tennis match, really. Fortunately, while Andra's acting can easily be spotted by Shell (a good connection to the previous chapter, where Ellipse mentions gato are good at spotting patterns), the cameraman and reporter must not be able to tell, if the present-day chapters are good indicators. Which is a testament to Andra's skills. And, I mean, a lot of what they say is legitimate. They really do care for Ellipse; why else would they assure Ellipse's escape, if not (in part) to keep Ellipse away from the terrible work environment that is Andra-Media? Andra becoming more animated when Ellipse is mentioned, and Tejal pointing out that Andra feels more manly when Ellipse is in danger, are the best signs of that. And yeah, there's something about that subtle sibling dynamic that I love, though I'm still mad at Andra for leaving Ellipse in the wide universe in the first place.
Man, there's not much more I can say about the chapter. The interview itself has such a creepy vibe, as fake as it is. Andra is lying, I heavily suspect the reporter has an agenda, and Andra-Media moderating anything sends chills down my spine. Shell doesn't even need to point out the farce, as Tejal acknowledges, but his comments do lead Tejal to look even closer and find out just how eerie it all is. But hey, at least there's a big justification behind Crane and Shell's interest in Ellipse. They've seen the interviews, they understand the situation, and they know something is desperately wrong here. Their willingness to look closer and find out the truth is heartwarming. Though, admittedly, I remember Tejal and his family being a lot less friendly when they first showed up however many chapters ago. At least, Tejal was pretty aggressive, and Crane and Shell managed to get arrested. It's possible that was more of a normal protocol, combined with Ellipse's evasiveness and Tejal's being naive (he doesn't piece together nearly as much in this chapter as Shell does). But my memory isn't all that great right now, so meh.
On the whole, this chapter has a thumbs-up from me! It has some great pacing, ties back to previous chapters well, and features an amazing family - great job!
Ughhh but why did you have to set up a cliffhanger in Chapter 61, now I don't have time to read/review Chapter 63. ;-;Oh I hope your finals were okay!! And don't worry. I think you'll have most of what you've been looking for when you do get to 63. : D
I like seeing a bit into Crane and Shell and getting hints of their thoughts as they initially investigate Ellie Bei. Especially considering Tejal earlier telling Ellipse that they wouldn't take her in if she had a good reason for running off - here we get to see that that's serious. I also have to say, I think this is probably the clearest, least confusing non-Ellipse chapter. I don't know if that's actually because of how it's written or if it's because I know so much more about the story at this point - I know about Andra, Andra-Media, etc. I'm not sure what to do about the earlier chapters, because it's probably because I know so much? So on the one hand, you can't just overexplain everything in the earlier non-Ellipse chapters just so they'll make sense. But on the other hand, some of those chapters were really confusing when I first read them and might discourage future readers.
Maybe when tutoring is done, I'll go back and re-read them to figure out if they're less confusing now that I know so much. Then I'll at least know for certain whether it's the information I have or the way the chapters are written that make those ones confusing or not. And then I'll let you know what I think.
(But you might have to poke me so I remember.)
Finally, I like seeing the interview, especially the part where Andra lights up while talking about Ellipse. Admittedly I'm not watching, this is all filtered through Tejal's perspective and what Crane and Shell think of it, but that part seemed genuine. I like getting more of an idea of Andra and Ellipse's relationship as siblings.
Hopefully I can get this week's chapter to be just as insightful then! There's a lot about to go down...