Conics Unfortunately: 59

Somehow, in the year-plus-several-months that Ellipse had spent incognito, as well as in the years before that, a plan had been born. In a daze, Ellipse traipsed up into the Ink, not paying attention to her surroundings beyond the layout of the walls. She pulled Tejal’s spare wheelchair out without even paying attention to its fine welding and sturdy axles, and rolled it to the dock floor, still lost in thought.

How had she not known the depth of this plan? Ellipse would not call herself unobservant, and sure, her older sibling had been acting funny before she was sent away, but judging by this Mi Na Park’s messages, everything had been in the works for at least two years before that awful first day on the earthling fold monitor. And now, things were even more complicated.

As Tejal clambered into the chair, Ellipse looked up at the ceiling, worrying her brow and biting her lips. She wished the boys had already managed to put a network of pinpoint generators in place. Then she would not have been slapped with an influx of messages from Earth; she would have just gotten all of them as they were sent.

“You doing okay?” Tejal asked. He looked up at her, one eyebrow piqued in concern. “You’ve been weird since we landed.”

“It has been like two minutes,” Ellipse fired back, only halfway feeling up to a bickering match.

“It’s been at least fifteen. You spent a long time just hanging out on the ship.”

Okay, he had a point. Shrugging, Ellipse trudged back into the Conics’s cargo hold to pick up their duffle bags, and then toward the great garage door that lead to the rest of the station. She punched the big red ‘open door’ button and hunched over to wait while the door rolled up. The boys joined her, and she noticed with a twinge of embarrassment that they were quietly looking at her, as if they expected her to explain her behavior right away.

She pinched her lips together and glanced at her watch. “You two have a meeting with an earthling think tank, right? What time in Eastern Daylight is that scheduled for?”

Tejal fidgeted with the tablet in his lap, and Mouthbot resumed translating.

“Well,” Focci started, “we break atmosphere at about, oh, eight in the morning? I am not the best with your time notation, but I believe that is fairly early.”

“Yep,” Ellipse replied.

“And then we make it to New York City at about nine. We will drop everything off at the hotel, see if there are any local messages from our crews, and then Tejal and I are meeting with Wellspring Incorporated over an eleven-thirty lunch at a fancy restaurant in… how do you say it? The center island.”

“Manhattan,” Tejal supplied in English, which was not helpful. He tapped on the tablet a few more times and picked up where Focci left off. “After that, we’ll have about an hour to get to Queens, wherever that is, and then we’ll meet the representatives from Inter-Tech.”

Focci flopped forwards, through the now-opened garage door, and peered down the long hallway. “Court is out at five in the evening, so we will go to say hello, and then all three of us will have dinner.”

Adjusting the duffle bags so that the handles stretched around her shoulders, Ellipse followed after Focci, and Tejal rolled along at her side.

“The judge will decide the fines on the second day we are planetside, right?” she asked, glancing around at the ISS’s interior. It was decorated in the newest earthling architectural trend, which Ellipse heard was something like an Arts and Crafts revival. Intricate, geometric details were carved into the cement walls, and every surface had been painted or plated in color. Straight lines of white shot down the hall, creating a perfect one-point perspective.

Ellipse had been under the impression that decoration was not the main focus of Arts and Crafts, but she liked the colors. Small windows in the floor, placed in long rows and columns, provided a long panorama of the starry sky outside the station, and Ellipse allowed herself to get lost in staring, watching as her feet floated over empty space.

They reached the planetside shuttle wing too soon. The boys headed for a gate that already had a line of people snaking out into the walkway, and Ellipse trudged after them, legs feeling heavier the closer she got to that gate. It was like the artificial gravity had increased only for her.

“What should I do while you two are at your meetings?” she asked, careful to keep her voice neutral. “I do not think I should join you; I cannot contribute anything.” She took a small step forward to keep with the slug-like line, and watched as a tall earthling with green hair stepped in line behind her.

Focci looked up at her, and his gills fluttered slowly, in that I-do-not-think-you-know-what-you-are-doing way that they sometimes did when Ellipse flew the ship too fast, but he kept quiet.

Tejal bit his lip. “You’ve never been to Earth before, right? I say if you don’t want to come with us, you should take the chance to explore a bit. New York is a big place. There’s a lot to see.”

Humming in thought, Ellipse glanced at her watch again. Randi’s friend might have mentioned being based in New York. They could meet up somewhere famous like the Met or Central Park, and Ellipse could do touristy things while bullying Mi Na Park into explaining the boatload of messages that had bombarded Ellipse’s watch when she entered Earth’s orbit.

When the line scootched forward again, Ellipse stayed in place, allowing the boys to get in front of her completely. She stretched her mouth into a thin line and brought up both hands to tap out a reply on her watch. Her message was short—just a time and a place—but hopefully Mi Na Park would be there. Ellipse took another step forward, and her gaze blurred. Her stomach sloshed and twisted, warning her of what her answer implied. About what her interactions with the boys and their machine and Spec Corp implied.

She was involved in big things, probably had been from the start. And she was finally going to act like it.

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ExOmelas
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Hi again :)

Nit-picks:

Then she would not have been slapped with an influx of messages from Earth; she would have just gotten all of them as they were sent.

This seems like an odd thing to focus on, and especially since the previous sentence is about a different plot point, it feels a little engineered.

“Manhattan,” Tejal supplied in English, which was not helpful.

Why not? Like, that's just the name of the thing.

Ellipse had been under the impression that decoration was not the main focus of Arts and Crafts

The way Arts and Crafts is capitalised makes it sound like this is a thing foreign to Ellipse, and that it is therefore a thing unique to Earth, which seems unlikely.

Overall:

I really really like that you haven't told us the actual content of the messages, just hinted at the importance of them. That's really good for the creation of suspense and I can't wait to see where the plot goes with that.

I think on a couple of occasions you go to slightly too much effort to remind us they've never been on Earth before. It's things like the Manhattan thing I mentioned, which aren't things that have tripped them up on any of the other planets they've stopped off at, that I've noticed.

Setting was good, flow was good. Maybe Focci and Tejal would have been more insistent about making sure she's okay but I'm not certain on that point.

Hope this helps,
Biscuits :)

Ahhh, the Arts and Crafts thing is definitely my major at uni showing. Sorry! It's an architectural/design movement from the early 1900s. I unfortunately slip into that a lot in these later chapters...

Ahhh I see! That makes more sense xD

Haha sorry. It's weird, like suddenly I have the technical language to talk about architecture and I can't stop. I get that it might be sort of alienating though.

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TheSilverFox
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The boys joined her, and she noticed with a twinge of embarrassment that they were quietly looking at her, as if they expected her to explain her behavior right away.


All I'm imagining is the nerds looking at her while crossing their arms and kind of pouting, which is probably far funnier to me than it should be. :P

Firstly, no grammar or spelling stuff to speak of - yay! Secondly, it's nice to get a direct answer concerning the plan. Beyond her sparse communications with "Randi," who apparently hasn't been all that informative, Ellipse knows next to nothing about the plan that's involved her going incognito for so long. Everything she should know she never received, because all that information had kept to Earth in the form of Mi Na Park's messages. I will admit, I have a bit of an issue with this? I feel like Park has been keeping correspondence with Randi, and Randi should've notified Ellipse at some point. Then again, Randi could've just assumed Ellipse already knew, or (more likely) there's a good possibility that Ellipse didn't need to be too involved until a certain point. Or maybe the Park-Ellipse line of communication posed the least amount of risk when transferring vital information, given Randi's situation. I dunno, I feel like something doesn't quite add up here, but that all depends on Randi's plan and how significant Ellipse is in it. On a related note, I really ought to read these chapters in a row when I get the chance - I feel like I miss so much nuance when I read these every week (and, given how much complexity I stuff into my novel, I feel a bit bad about the posting time). Either way, Ellipse at least knows now, and she's willing to meet up with Mi, so that'll be interesting to see.

Otherwise, I love this chapter. The itinerary's a nice touch, as is your setting (Arts and Crafts seems like my kind of design, silly as the name makes it sound) and word choice. I was suspicious of "worrying her brow" at first, but I realized it was something I could easily visualize and get the meaning of. "Scootched" (which my spellchecker tells me isn't right but that doesn't bother me in the slightest) and Focci's "I-do-not-think-you-know-what-you-are-doing" are also highlights. They contribute to a steady pace, slowing down enough at appropriate times to reveal Ellipse's worry and frustration. Her emotions are also an excellent part of the chapter. You capture that sense of being distracted in her movements and vision well enough that I can easily understand what she's going through. It's like when I have a coherent list or idea of what I'm supposed to do, then something comes along to shake everything up - I panic, I stop focusing on my surroundings, etc. On the bright side, at least she has a strategy for dealing with Park by setting up the meeting (though I doubt it'll go well, partly because I still don't trust Park). That moment when she realizes how little she's been hiding - she's helping the fight against both Andra-Media and Spec. Corp - is a flawless conclusion. So yeah, all in all, yet another remarkable chapter - well done!

Oh boy you're going to enjoy the plot of the next chapter.

If you want to know what the Arts and Crafts style is, it's a housing style from the late 1800s/early 1900s, which sort of ended when FL Wright got on scene and derived his Prairie Style off of it. You can look up the Gamble House in Pasadena.

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BluesClues
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Oh, I forgot to ask in the last chapter: Tejal has an American accent? I thought he's been living on...not Earth? For a long time, I thought. Unless he learned whatever Earthling language from an American Earthling, I guess.

It really threw me off at the start of this chapter when Ellipse knows the plan, but then I realized she had actually read Mi Na Park's messages between the end of the last chapter and the start of this one. It was kind of jarring for me, but I might have just missed it because I'm tired. You do a good job of building the tension around this for most of the chapter, although it gets lost for a while when Our Heroes are discussing the layout of their first day on Earth.

I'm also confused about the judge because I don't know what the fine is for? Unless this is about their old captain and crew and the fight they got into way back when. In which case I'd probably just want a couple reminders about that throughout the story.



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