Conics Unfortunately: 24

The post-presentation fair was cancelled. Tejal and I watched as a collection of tyran in black jumpsuits dismantled our stall for us, stowing thin metal poles inside thinner, neon-colored drawstring bags. A herd of saur dumped our flyers and business cards back into their shipping boxes, and then a duo of earthlings folded up the plastic table and slid it away.

We were left with a few still-crisp boxes and an empty feeling in our souls. Unbelieving, we stared at the huge, desolate hall and tried to reclaim every happy situation we had imagined for this day.

“Ellie is going to be so disappointed,” Tejal sang eventually. His voice wavered, and he hit a few wrong notes, but I knew what he meant. He rolled his chair back and forth, as if circle-swimming, before looking back at our boxes and letting out a long sigh. “No investors, no money. Now what?”

I suggested calling Ellie, and Tejal cringed.

“But we failed,” he said.

“It was not our fault. She will understand.”

Tejal shot me that pleading look that he used on Ellie whenever she mentioned money. “She will try to help, and you know it. She cannot afford that any more.”

I dropped the subject and whistled for a nearby tyran to help us with the boxes. Just because Ellie could not afford to help us right now did not mean she would leave us floundering. She knew marketing and investment like a current that led home, and it was her firm belief that Tejal and I should not be hindered by money.

“We should proceed to the witness interrogation,” I suggested. “The sooner we can meet reporters the better.”

Tejal squinted at me, still translating in his head. “Yes.” And then he swiveled his chair about, and we started for the exit.

The going was slow. Tejal was so lethargic that he looked like his chair had been weighed down by bricks, and for once I did not feel out of breath trying to keep up. We moped through the long journey out of the project fair hall, and we moped as we meandered down the too-tall, too-wide hallway beyond that. Even the convention center’s crisp, white walls, brightened by the light flooding in from the floor-to-ceiling windows, did nothing to lift our heavy mood.

The interrogation passed almost too quickly. I remember standing in line, waiting while officers from every species took down personal information, but while I know I then answered questions for a siren investigator and then had to wait for Tejal, I most distinctly recall drinking liter upon liter of water.

It was tasty water, a tad bit salty and cold with oxygen. When I offered some to Tejal, he took one gulp and spit it all out, back into the tiny paper cup. Then he muttered in an earthling language and sang what I think was supposed to be an apology. His voice went squeaky and shifted registers during one of the intervals.

“Now for the reporters,” I said. “We should salvage what coverage we got.”

Tejal nodded. “Yes.”

“It is alright,” I tried. I maneuvered to face the doors leading outside, careful to keep my tail from smacking anything. “The specifus know we beat them.”

Unable to put together the words or find his starting pitch, Tejal just scrunched his face, casting dark lines across his nose and forehead. He leaned forward so he could catch the bottom of one wheel and then spun quickly to face the doors as well. Frowning, he fingered the edge of one armrest, as though toggling Mouthbot on like he could on the chair Ellie had insisted we build before she left. The ISTS had not allowed that chair on the premises though, so we were left with only Tejal’s shaky trade siren.

“Thousands saw us present today.”

Tejal let out a little snort. “The universe has billions of people.” He kept scowling, even as I flopped to the wheelchair access button and gave it a solid slap.

“Stop looking so mad,” I suggested, as I followed him out the doors. “The public only likes just anger, and you are not justly angry.” I received an eloquent grunt in response, and then we braved the outdoors.

This particular ISTS took place on the balmy, heavy-aired planet Un. The atmosphere was so huge that, at ground surface, the weight almost felt like being underwater. ISTS, however, took place on a floating platform held up by gigantic helium balloons that kept visitors well above the heaviest gases. As I followed Tejal down the walkway connecting the convention center to the city’s central plaza, I peered down through the glass barrier, where a great sea of colorful gases swirled like ocean currents far, far beneath the platform’s metal floors.

“Look, Tejal,” I said, stopping to point.

He leaned sideways to look over the barrier, and his eyes widened just a tad.

I grinned. “Take a picture. We can send it to Ellie, and she will write a poem for us.”

Rolling his eyes, Tejal reached into the pocket on the back of his chair and pulled out his tablet. He held it up and snapped a few pictures, and then gestured for me to join him for a shot with the both of us. Ellie always seemed more upbeat after we updated her, and occasionally, if we sent her something particularly nice, she sent back recordings of herself making poetry with the metal tube.

Once Tejal stowed his tablet away again, he sighed and looked to the plaza. It was just ahead, and already, a few members of the crowd there had noticed us, but the majority were still focused on the press liaison standing on a raised platform in the plaza’s center. Skyscrapers surrounded the place on all sides, but from a far enough distance that the pink, eternal sunset still took up most of the sky.

If the crowd had not been there, I would have suggested another picture.

“We should bring Ellie here once everything settles back in your system,” I said, nudging Tejal forward. “We should all travel together again.”

He jerked, startled, and then pushed himself towards the writhing mass of people, a sad smile curling his lips and wrinkling his eyebrows. “Yes,” he sang softly. “We should.”

-A Rough Translation of Focci's Ballad

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ExOmelas
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I'm going to attempt to get three of these done today, so here goes!

Nit-picks and nice moments:

I had a note to myself written here to make sure it was confirmed at some point that Ellie was Ellipse. I wasn't sure it was entirely necessary, might even have been a bit laboured, but you managed it brilliantly here anyway:

as though toggling Mouthbot on like he could on the chair Ellie had insisted we build before she left.


This particular ISTS took place on the balmy, heavy-aired planet Un.

Do I know what ISTS is? I don't think I do. I would quite like to.

she sent back recordings of herself making poetry with the metal tube.

Is it meant to be obvious what the metal tube is?

Overall:

Am I sticking with the freeflow? Hrm... yes, I think I shall.

My absolute favourite thing about this chapter is that there's a sadness about the fact that they're no longer with Ellipse (and I know this is quite a bit after the previous chapter because they've travelled long enough to call her Ellie and been away long enough for travelling together to not be the norm). Currently they seem to tolerate/irritate each other, so it's nice to know they become good friends, but simultaneously sad to know that this inevitably comes to an end.

I also enjoy the general feel of this chapter and the bit where they take selfies is a really vivid image in my mind. I can feel their emotion really strongly and they feel like very real characters. However, I thought coming into this that this was quite short and think that it could indeed have been longer. I would have liked for this to end on maybe a more sinister note? It's quite sad, but I sort of get the feeling it's going to work out anyway. Something to put suspense at the end of the chapter and keep this parallel story in the mind when I go back to the other time period (presumably) in the next chapter.

Finally, this might be because I'm reading these so spaced out but I don't remember that many details of where the last section from Focci's POV left off. I know it would seem a bit weird if you read them all together, but maybe he could recap slightly in a couple of sentences? I'm sure you could figure out a subtle way to work that in.

Hope this helps,
Biscuits :)

Hmm, I may not have directly connected the ISTS with Intergalactic Science and Technology Summit. You're right about that. However, it will come up in a later conversation in uh... I guess you'd call it the present timeline?

Also, Focci calls earthling musical instruments by weird names on multiple occasions, so 'metal tube' was my way of giving a vague hint about something.

Thanks so much!

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BluesClues
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Now one from Focci's viewpoint? ALL RIGHT, COOL. I do so love details like this.

His voice wavered, and he hit a few wrong notes, but I knew what he meant.


I'm sure you're tired of hearing that from me (except actually probably not because it's always nice to hear what you're doing well, right?)

This one didn't confuse/bother me as much as that first one from Tejal's viewpoint - no, not the very first one, the one where he and Focci gave their presentation. But I think it's because this sort of feels like it picks up from there, more or less, whereas that one was out of nowhere (which I know is just because it actually isn't chronological).

The only thing is, I know you mentioned an attack in this chapter, and I think I do remember something about an attack in that other chapter I mentioned...but if this is the aftermath of an attack, everyone's awfully chill about it. No fear or relief or "oh my God we almost died" or anything?

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... you may want to recheck chapter 9? All the future excerpts are from Focci.

And yeah, I know I missed out on a whole lot of chaos. I mostly wanted to focus on Tejal and Focci's project, but since the Titan mess is mentioned a lot, I should have included the immediate aftermath of the attack too.

Thanks!

OH so it is. For some reason I remembered it being from Tejal, but I think it's just because he missed Ellipse and it was cute so he was kind of all I remembered.

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TheSilverFox
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Note: Ugggh, I wrote this yesterday, but then YWS shut down for scheduled maintenance and I had to copy it and leave it in a word document. Fortunately, it's working now, which means I can submit my final July review! :D

He held it up and snapped a few pictures, and then gestured for me to join him for a shot with the both of us.


Ooh, you mean a selfie (please don't punch me)? :P

At this point, it's hard for me to see how this could be perceived as unjust anger. I mean, the old-fashioned space racists feel threatened because somebody just leaped over their technological boundaries. Hence, they left the meeting in force, and it wouldn't surprise me if they used their interference (and reports of the Recreational Vehicle of Impending Doom's disaster) to assure that Tejal and Focci have as little funding as possible. Under those circumstances, I would be fuming, though perhaps more frightened by the sudden death of a man in front of a crowded audience. Honestly, I'm surprised that I don't see more people fleeing in terror from the planet, complete with an array of guards and defenders scouring the space for any other attackers. It wouldn't surprise me if the one that was there has already either been killed or (in case it's a robot, or something?) removed, but I would imagine that they (the ISTS) have to have stringent protocol that accounts for multiple attackers and angles of attack. I get the feeling this isn't the first time this has happened, after all. Then again, that depends on how easily the threat was addressed, and how long ago it was. Still, the complacency of everyone seems just a bit odd (unless that's why they're talking to the reporters and others).

This whole chapter tugs at my heartstrings. Tejal and Focci have a wonderful piece of technology, and it's being thrown right back at their faces. Ellipse is unavailable, possibly in a war zone, but she's still trying as hard as she can to provide funds and motivation. I wonder what kind of a mess she's gotten herself into this time; at the least, it appears to be even bigger than in the rest of the story, considering how much it restrains her. That they still try to find hope and security when and where they can is touching, though. As such, I feel like they have the potential to vault over the specifus and Spec. Corp. Determination, a little business savvy, and the right opportunities are instrumental to success in the business world (and a good amount of luck, of course), and they appear to have at least two of those. Until then, at least they have the skies (and you made some lovely descriptions of the planet, by the way). Hence, this is more of a bittersweet chapter, and I'm intensely curious to see the story that leads them to this point. Once again, well done, and I look forward to your next chapter! :D

I refuse to use the word selfie unironically in literature.

Thanks for pointing out the issue with public reaction. I definitely skipped over some details in that area that should have been included.



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