Conics Unfortunately: 23

Because even the universe had declared three to be a magic number, the Savra station conveniently had three main halls—one for each member of the Conics—which were connected by countless loops and additional docking spaces. Once Ellipse finished explaining her plan, Focci headed for the luxury hall, Tejal wheeled his way towards the section for passengers and unimportant businesspeople, and Ellipse set out to survey the rest of the shipping area.

She waited until the boys were out of sight, lost in the crowd of saur and specifus, before hauling herself into the nearest bathroom.

The saur, being raptor-shaped and generally unable to sit, used squat toilets, and they kept huge gaps under the stall doors to create extra tail space. Ellipse just about tripped over a leathery, yellow tail as she crept down the length of the bathroom, eyes peeled for white roots and red vines. Her boots squeaked on the tiny, grey ceramic floor tiles, and she kept glancing back at the entrance in case someone walked in and found her acting suspicious.

By the time she made it down the length of the room, the yellow saur had finished up with the waste expulsion and was backing out of the stall like a car from a parking spot. Judging from the size, this saur was young and had not quite decided on a gender yet, but they still paused when Ellipse met their eyes. Maybe they thought she should have gone to one of the other bathrooms.

Ellipse only knew a few words in any of the hundreds of saur languages, but she tried a few combinations of soft syllables and tongue rolls and hoped she had sounded at least vaguely coherent. Then, before the little saur could react, she scurried out and rejoined the masses in the shipping hall.

A few hundred steps later, Ellipse turned down a quiet branching hall. Air-tight glass walls lined the walkway, and beyond each panel sat an empty docking bay with the metal sliding doors closed against the vacuum of space. Everything was oversized, especially in comparison to the saur, who rarely grew to even Ellipse’s height, and with the echoes of business still trailing down the hall, the emptiness left Ellipse feeling detached. Supposedly, the saur had requested extra space in order to further their asteroid mining industry, but they must not have gotten very far with that.

Ellipse glanced around the empty hallway for a moment, just to make sure the red specifus was not standing in plain sight somewhere, before ducking into yet another bathroom.

It was exactly like the last, from the tiny floor tiles to the dim, bioluminescent bacteria squirming about in the clear, plastic ceiling panels. Grimacing, Ellipse clomped up and down the bathroom, careful not to bend over too much and look like she was peeking. If she only inclined her head, she could make the excuse that she was searching for a stall with a lower door.

She found no red specifus in that bathroom, or in the next, or in the one after that. And in between bathrooms, she poked her nose into every open docking bay and itty bitty nook hidden between the giant cement blocks that made up the walls. Ellipse even found the emergency airlock doors (they were tucked behind long, thin strips of plastic textured to look like cement) and the backup atmosphere regulation system (behind the tiny window in a metal door marked ‘staff only’ with bright green paint), but she could not find the specifus.

By the time Ellipse made it through half of the shipping block, she had wasted forty-five minutes, and her boots scuffed and dragged with every step. Yes, she could survive some exercise in heightened gravity, but not an hour of speed-walking up and down hallways and wrenching open steel doors. Panting, she cracked open the door to bathroom number five, slipped inside, and immediately doubled over to catch her breath.

Some part of her brain reminded her to check under the stall doors, and Ellipse’s eye flicked towards the nearest stall, where a tendril of white curled around the shiny door hinge.

That was someone’s root, clearly. Gulping, Ellipse took a step back and shoved a hand in her pocket. She kept a mirror in there somewhere, from before she had realized that it was unwise to wear makeup while cleaning. When her fingers closed around the little plastic case, she pulled it out and flicked open the lid and held the mirror close to the ground.

It took a bit of tilting and finagling, but soon enough, Ellipse had a view of the red specifus. They had pulled themselves up to perch precariously on top of the raised part of the squat toilet, with only tiny roots extended to provide balance. Their deep red trunk and leaves were smooth with youth, and even though red coloration did not help with photosynthesis on the specifus home planet, this individual was probably just as tall as Ellipse.

Biting her lips, Ellipse closed the mirror and dumped in back into her pockets. Then she rooted around for her lightbox and shoved that under the stall door.

“Excuse me,” she flashed. “Would you happen to be-

Before she had a chance to think, Ellipse was on her back. Her forehead smarted, throbbing in time with her heartbeat, and she had a weight on her chest that kept her from breathing. She peeled her eyes open, not remembering when she had closed them, and came face to face with a writhing tangle of red vines and flashing lights.

“Who are you?” the red specifus flashed, lights bright and fast and angry. “Where did you come from, and what do you want?”

The red specifus could have at least given Ellipse a chance to speak. Suddenly glad that Focci and Tejal tended to push manual labor onto her, she pushed herself up onto her elbows and forced the specifus to tumble off of her chest. She fumbled for her lightbox, wishing that the room would stop spinning, and tried to come up with a response.

“I do not want to… hurt you,” Ellipse said. Her fingers felt slow on the lightbox, or maybe she was just woozy. “Or turn you in. I have been hunted before.”

“You can’t prove that. Get out of here.”

Ellipse felt her stomach turn, and she tried to pull herself towards the open stall, but the red specifus shot out a vine and curled it around her neck. She could still breathe, but the threat was clear.

“Don’t move. Just talk,” the specifus ordered.

“My… friends,” Ellipse managed to flash. “They are trying to build a fold generator. I want you to tell them about the Impending.”

“To discourage them? To help them? I refuse to step into your trap. I know you earthlings as a whole may not like Spec Corp, but stereotypes are dangerous.” The red specifus bristled, leaves shaking, and tightened their grip around Ellipse’s neck.

She wheezed. “Either outcome is fine,” Ellipse flashed. “I just do not want anyone to die when they test their invention. Besides, I want to help you. Surviving an explosion is not a crime.”

“I was under a contract,” the specifus said. “I was legally bound.”

“A contract means nothing if you had no say in the terms.”

At that, the specifus’s grip loosened. Ellipse gasped, throat cooling with the onslaught of air, and fought to keep a steady hold on her lightbox. “I am not blind. I have a hunch about the kind of governing that happens on your homeworld. If you will help my friends, I will help you reach safety. I know a safe house.”

“Your friends will meet me here,” the specifus said, vines curling in. “And while they come, you will tell me about this safe house.”

“Deal,” Ellipse flashed. She held out both hands, and the red specifus’s vines slithered up her arms. For a brief moment, the specifus squeezed, and then the agreement was sealed.

Immediately, Ellipse held her watch up to her face and tapped on it to send Tejal and Focci her location. Then she fished some crumpled paper and an almost-dry pen from her pockets and scribbled out a name and address. “Find passage to the moon Europa, in the earthling system,” she flashed, before pressing the paper into the red specifus’s vines. “When you get there, hail a cab and ask them to bring you to the first name on here. If anyone at the safe house asks who sent you, show them the second name.”

“I still don’t know who you are,” the specifus said, examining the paper. “But I am Soph.”

Ellipse smiled. “It is not the name I wrote, but you can call me Ellipse.”

The specifus crawled closer, as if needing to examine Ellipse’s face. “Ellipse? Like an oval? You would not happen to work on the Conics?”

How had- no, nevermind. It might not have been accidental, but Ellipse knew her name fit into the ship’s theme. Tentatively, she nodded.

“Ah, then I know I can trust you. Here is something you should know, earthling.” Soph pulled back and drew up to their full height. “Any specifus ship named after knowledge is a trustworthy one. Their crews may not like your kind, but they like Spec Corp even less. If you ever need help, find one of them.”

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ExOmelas
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All that and I've fallen spectacularly behind...

Nit-picks and nice moments:

Your third paragraph is delightful. Perfect pacing and sensory details, as well as nice bits of description that don't feel forced.

Then, before the little saur could react, she scurried out and rejoined the masses in the shipping hall.

Realised here that I don't really know why she went to the bathroom. It seems more specific than just to check for the specifus there. Will keep an eye out for an explanation.

finagling

An enjoyble lexical invention.

The red specifus could have at least given Ellipse a chance to speak.

Idk, she did ambush them in a bathroom. I'd be angry too :P

“You can’t prove that. Get out of here.”

For a moment I thought they meant that she couldn't prove she'd been hunted before. Maybe either clarify this or say something like "Why should I care?" which would probably have a similar effect.

“Your friends will meet me here,” the specifus said, vines curling in. “And while they come, you will tell me about this safe house.”

I think it would make sense to have a moment of hesitation on the part of the specifus here.

Overall:

I'm going to try free-flow for the overall stuff. Let me know which way you prefer.

So, it took me quite a long time to read this chapter. By that I mean a couple of days after my last review on your story, until now. This is largely because I got review burnout. It also took me a couple of hours to do tonight, but this is largely because I got weird anxiety tension for unrelated reason halfway through. Regardless, I think that the first half of your chapter could have been at a faster pace.

I think there was probably more description of her hunt than necessary. And more importantly, it's a lot of the same words if that makes sense. A lot of kind of like... "the next bathroom" kinda a thing. (Oh god sorry for the repeated words in this review, I'm holding a conversation with my flatmate while doing it.)

The interaction with the specifus was great though. I raced through the second half of the chapter. The only thing was that they maybe seemed a little too quick to start talking to Ellipse rather than threatening her, since clearly they're feeling desperate. I think there should probably be more of a struggle there.

I really like your last paragraph. It feels warm and tense at the same time ^.^

Hope this helps,
Biscuits :)

Hey no worries! Burnout happens to everyone at some point.

The bathroom thing probably is pretty repetitive now that I think about it. But I will use the bathrooms again, so I guess that means I'll get another shot at pulling it off well. Thanks for letting me know!

Catch you later!

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TheSilverFox
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“I still don’t know who you are,” the specifus said, examining the paper. “But I am Soph.”


Though perhaps unintentional (but the last line makes me doubt this), I must presume their name is Sophocles?

Yay, I've finally caught up (until Monday, of course)! At this point, I haven't much to say, but I will try to do so anyway. It's a marvelous chapter, with a nice amount of detail about the nature of the saur and the space station. There is something ironic and funny in the fact that the saur are mining meteorites, as though taking revenge for the poor fortunes of their earthling compatriots. Actually, that makes me wonder if the saur and traditional dinosaurs are, in any way, related, considering their implied similar appearances and attributes. It is always possible, however patently absurd, that the dinosaurs devised advanced technology, with a group leaving to explore other words and being stranded upon the Saurus system. Hence, without the means to return (and not the awareness that the rest of their species had, unfortunately, perished) nor the ability to exploit the resources of the region, their technology stagnated and they were trapped on one, or several, planets, only to have made a recent recurrence in the annals of space and time. It is odd of me to propose such a situation, I know, but I have an overactive imagination. XD

Otherwise, the action in this chapter is spectacular. The details on bathrooms (even if a bit gross) is well-conveyed, as is Ellipse's strategy to search the docks for the red specifus. It seems odd to me that she should traverse half of the massive area in only forty-five minutes, but it can be presumed (as the text supports) that she chose only particular places, as the specifus would be stupid to be out in the open. Indeed, the specifus is within one of those bathrooms, so I must admit that Soph seems rather bright. Beyond that, their strong reaction and interrogation of Ellipse, given the circumstances, is justified. The sense of mystery conveyed by his actually knowing the crew of the Conics, which I suspect is the product of a meeting with its like-minded captain, and the two names that Ellipse wrote, complete with a safe spot in Europa that implies she's working with a few people in her efforts to hide, is magnificent. I wonder who exactly she's conspiring/hiding with, and why they are willing to risk their lives to keep her safe (telling me that she is dearly important, more than I had assumed, to certain individuals beyond the reach of Andra-Media). Nevertheless, for the moment, she's succeeded in giving Tejal and Focci another resource on their quest to the miniature fold generator, so I'm rather satisfied with this chapter.

Once more, thanks for another great chapter, and I will finally catch up tomorrow, when I review your latest one. Well done!

If you couldn't tell, I do like talking about bathrooms in literature. Mostly because I once read a tumblr post where the poster wondered about why characters in most literature never used the bathroom.

Thanks again!

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BluesClues
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Hmmm. I question whether Soph would actually know she works on the Conics just because her name fits the theme. I mean, I'm sure you actually have an actual reason Soph knows who she is, but I'm not sure Ellipse would actually think "oh, well, coincidence." Especially as a hunted woman. If she's had people after her before (which she has, even though they were after her under a different name), I'd think she would be a little more wary when a stranger knows something about her just from her assumed name.

On the note of names, however

Ellipse smiled. “It is not the name I wrote, but you can call me Ellipse.”


I like this, because you very subtly tie her other identity and the history that we still don't know about her back into the story. I'm fascinated by this, because - you know, normally I'd expect her mysterious past to be a huge plot point or maybe the even the main point of the story. And it could certainly still turn out the way, but if it does I think it'll be in an unexpected way, simply because you've got other plot things going on that are more of the focus. Normally we probably already would've learned virtually everything about her backstory, or it would've caused more trouble for her than it has so far. But it doesn't feel like you've forgotten about it, because of little bits like this where you remind us it's still there. So I'm really excited to see where you go with it.

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...I must have missed this while I was at orientation. Sorry!

Anyways, it's good to know I'm doing okay with Ellipse's backstory. Pacing with mysteries is always difficult. Thank you!



It's been many years since I had such an exemplary vegetable.
— Mr Collins, Pride and Prejudice