Young Writers Society

Last review for ya ~

and deals with unpleasant

smells

no one ever

thinks

about a table

a bright, light lamp

that sees us

and lets us see

think on these

these helpful things

that we take for

granted

when some have

nothing

Hey! MapleWay here with a quick review!

This was a great poem and a great topic! I liked how you gave simple objects a personality. It gives the reader a little bit of perspective on how we take many of these things for granted. It made me think of all of the other things I take for granted a lot of the time. So all I want to say is thank you.

Fun fact I wrote this review while sitting in a chair. Yes, I felt bad for it.

Yes! Gratitude! My therapy senses are tingling. Jokes aside, I love how you focused on simple, household objects. A lot of gratitude poems focus on nature, so it's nice to have this focus on mundane objects we take for granted. A suggestion I'd make is to show how the chair and lamp helps us rather than how they put up with us. You did that with the lamp and it was much more effective. Overall, great job! Thanks for the poem.

Hello, lovely Momo! c: I remember reading this poem awhile ago, and I thought I'd finally stop by with a review! ^_^

I love the message of this poem. It's very clear and easy to understand. We often hear the phrase "don't take things for granted," but instead of being cliche or talking about things we hear all of the time, you used very ordinary things that most people wouldn't think twice about - a chair, a table. The use of such random, ordinary things made the "argument" of this poem stronger, as it supports the idea that these are things we don't consider in our day to day life. Overall, I loved the idea behind this poe, and the way you delivered! I'm going to go stanza stanza and offer more thoughts for you c: Please feel free to disregard any suggestions you don't agree with!

no one ever

thinks

about a chair

that supports us

and deals with unpleasant

smells

no one ever

thinks

about a table

that stands our

crumbs

and shivers through the spills

no one ever

thinks

about a lamp

a bright, light lamp

that sees us

and lets us see

think on these

these helpful things

that we take for

granted

when some have

nothing

Good message about appreciating things that seem insignificant to us, yet serve purposes we use every day. There is also good use of repetition in the poem that causes most readers to take note of the important phrase that is vital to the theme. Though the poem is very good I have noticed that there is a lack of capitalization, although this ironically works in the poem's favor. The lack of capitalization could maybe symbolize appreciating the words themselves rather than wanting more, in turn this adds to the theme. That said this is a really good poem.

Hey there! Anne for a review

It was a really deeply thought and well executed poem. Yes, most people do not think about these things- because they are 'things'. That being said, it was a different perspective to look at everyday things. A lovable concept. The message of the poem was sweet as candy. I belong to a country where so many people are below the poverty line, so it really hits hard.(although I won't lie, i have thought about these things and am really grateful to them , also food )

I like the personification of these objects. Especially that of the lamp.
The vocabulary is great too. The to-the-point language makes it a pleasant read.

It is very lucid and also sounds lyrical when read aloud, a quality some poems lack.

The ending was great. Especially that the last line ends with nothing. So that it can also be a symbolism that you will only truly think of these things when you have , nothing.

A touching poem.
Keep writing.will read more of your work

Its such a touching poem<3

hey,
before I start reviewing I just wanted you to know there's people out there for you,
and if you ever need someone to listen, I'll always be there
I may be thinking this the wrong way, but poems are the colours of our souls, and if you're feeling blue or down right now, or tomorrow, or yesterday, or at anytime really- know that there's always someone there for you 💜

Now
On to the review <3

For vocab and grammar, I really don't have anything to say.
Excepte that one line, in the last stanza, first verse, "thanks on these", when it logically should be "thanks to these" or "thank these". Of course it flows less well, but that's what's grammatically correct.

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There's just something infinitely touching about this poem, the last line sounds like something my mother would say when I don't eat my food, like "don't take this for granted ! Think about that African child who could've eaten this !" because that way of thinking is so horrendously wrong, it's refreshing to see you take another take on it. Instead of thinking about those who don't have it, you think also of how those things feel. How we neglect them and take them for granted, while some people dream of obtaining it.
I hope you don't think that way about yourself
No one takes you for granted
You are a beautiful person who writes angelically, and the last thing someone would think about you, is thinking you are just that table they bought and then left in the dust, or that chair, or that lamp.

Hi! Hannah here for a quick review. Good job on this! You made the inanimate objects come to life and make people realize things that we take for granted that other people might not have, which was the purpose. There are some letters that need to be capitalized, though.

"no one ever

thinks". The n in no one should be capitalized.

"no one ever

thinks". The n in no one should be capitalized, again.

"no one ever

thinks". The n in no one should be capitalized, again.
Other than those minor, nit- picky grammar mistakes great job! I hope to hear more from you! Keep writing. I hope you had a merry Christmas and that you have a happy New Year!


Hannah