Hey there MomoMajesty. Just dropping by like you requested. I meant to get here earlier, but I'm glad to see you already have two great reviews.
I am always excited to see what young writers are doing with putting images and written word together. It usually creates an interesting formatting choice that I don't see very often. Having to match letters to font to colors that fit upon a background is a very precise process. You've done well in this attempt to get everything to match up correctly. I think it might give some better contrast to the background, while still drawing in scheme colors, if you want with a an orange yellow color for the text. Or perhaps a color that doesn't show up in the picture scheme at all because there's always going to be one letter/word that falls on the horizon.
Unless...
You choose to change the current formatting. Personally, I'm conflicted by the way you've broken up the word "bit". I think I can see what you're trying to do with it and if you want to keep it split up, this would be my suggestion for the spacing.
b
[tab] i
[tab] [tab] t
If you have the letters going down on an angle, like they're going down some stairs, that helps keep the word together during this stretching process.
In terms of the actual content, it is a poetry topic that I've seen a lot, but then again, I've read thousands of pieces of poetry. There may be a need to create a more solid piece of poetry by focusing more on the emotional output over the background that you put it on. I think a lot of young writers get distracted with creating certain aesthetics within their pieces. The background is nice - it's just a neutral piece of media. It's not adding any positive or any negatives to the piece so it comes to thinking about how each action within a poem will affect the audience.
Just as every line has to earn its right to be included in your final work, each formatting choice should be given the same considerations. So my biggest tip for you is to always work on the poem to where it can create an image in the reader's mind, rather than you having to supply that image.
I hope this helps.
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